Subject: You've read 'Brony Hero of Equestria,' haven't you?
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Posted on: 2014-04-01 05:28:00 UTC
I could tell by the use of 'Seduce Lindir.' For those who have never read Brony Hero of Equestria, a reoccurring joke within the story is that you can (try to) seduce anypony you meet. They end with...Interesting results.
Actually, if it were me, I would not have the main characters be any established agents. If they were previously established, then as a reader, I feel the need to use what I know of the character to influence my actions, rather then what I would do/be funny. Rather, I would have the agent be one of a few things.
1. A recruited bit character. This way, jokes could be made on how the agent has no personality, and so can do anything the reader wants. A literal blank slate.
2. A Crash Dummy that came to life. This would allow for heavy lamp shading, as a living You crash dummy is supposed to act as the character in a second-person fic. Now a CYOA story makes more sense, as a living You dummy has to have a narrative involving second person surrounding it.
3. Both. After all, agents need a partner. In this case, it would make sense for the living You dummy to be the main character, while the bit character is your partner. Occasionally, a prompt can occur that says "Be The Other Guy," and you can take the role of the partner for a little bit. You can even show this switch further by having the partner's sections in first person instead of second."
Oh, I have an idea for the agent's names! The sentient dummy is, obviously, You. The bit character is Mia. Probably pronounced me-a.
Funny as it can be, you need to have some non-insane options for a few pages. Sure, what happens can be insane, but you need a bit of buildup before you can start licking Lindir's face. Just saying.
Also, that "You can only get hear by cheating" page? I don't like it, but if it does exist, there had better be jokes about plotholes and some serious fourth-wall breaking.