Subject: Re: I'm trying to circumvent that issue. (WALL OF TEXT)
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Posted on: 2013-09-24 20:59:00 UTC

I think that works very well from the Stu/Sue angle. There are a few other things to think of, though, although some of them are fairly elementary.

I'd very much like for the LI character to do other things in between the relationship-building points described here (can't tell if that's already planned). I (and probably most readers) prefer characters who go about their business and develop attatchments to each other on the side, as opposed to the relationship being at the core of the plot. When a character is put in place who does not appear except in their role as LI, that's usually my signal to put the book down.


There's also the damsel-in-distress/faux-action-girl/stay-in-the-kitchen component to keep in mind. It likely won't be obvious since you seem like a competant writer, but if I were writing the story I'd make it an obvious aversion: either she runs off on her own and SUCCEEDS in whatever it was she was doing dispite the risk, or runs into a dangerous situation that even both of them together can't face head on, and while Michael is sensible enough to want to retreat, she's still Leeroying and has to be talked down.

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