Subject: Good work
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Posted on: 2015-07-11 11:04:00 UTC

But I wonder how Valon got the power of knowing when Kala understands him.
The girtablilu took a bit to figure out what he was getting at. When she understood, though, he smiled.
Or it is a typo and you meant "she smiled".

Krautpicking:
1) I’ve never heard a German use "Blut" in swearing; this is probably a bloody Yankees’ habit.
"Scheiße! We forgot the TARDIS!” would work better.
2) We have the weird habit of capitalizing all nouns, not just proper nouns. If Valon has a good reason to swear by shit and blood, "Blut" should be capitalized.
3) I feel that "Blut und Scheiße" sounds better, although still weird. I have no rational explanation for this, it’s either "put the longer word at the end", or "progress from unpleasant to repugnant", maybe both.

HG

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