*cleans his throat* Hoom, hoom.

Activity: Yeah, we all know and love you. Clear.

PPC knowledge: Mostly OK, but there are three problems. One is that Kitty and Kay are too young. I don't remember who said that over the time agents got older as the Boarders did, but a) it's true and b) the general consensus today is "no agents below teen age", especially since being an agent is no job for a little kid. 12-13 is really pushing it, I think. The second is that torture is forbidden - yes, torturing Sues is verboten, too. (That won't be a problem if Kay won't follow through on his plans.) The third and last one is that I don't think the Flowers would particularly mind two more non-Suvian people in HQ. Conversely, I'm not so sure they'll recruit such young children - see above.
Oh, also, the hallways of HQ are grey, not white.
Other than that, though, you're golden.

Fic to spork: Oh, look, a Sue. Oh look, plagiat (plagiarism). Yeah, kill it with fire, aright.

Writing ability (creative): I love your characters (aside from the aforementioned problems), the prompts are funny and there's nothing jarring I can spot. You're good.

Writing ability (technical): Looks OK to me.

So, since there are only a few mistakes to finish, I'll wait a bit until you fix them, OK? It shouldn't take you much time.

I do have some reservations. Thirteen seems awfully young for a DMS agent, and twelve is definitely too young. I'm not convinced that the PPC is in the business of employing child soldiers. The idea of Kay employing an M1918 is... well, laughable, really. He'd be better off with an AK-74, and that isn't just my socialist ideology talking; they're easy to maintain, extremely reliable, and well-suited to missions in modern continua. Including Harry Potter, come to that. I've no idea where the idea that technology doesn't work on Hogwarts grounds comes from, but it obviously does - but that's a rant for another day.

I'm also extremely worried by this line:

"His method of violence is planned and calculated, and he has several large folders with notes on Sue-torturing."

Er, no? That's kind of the exact opposite of what the PPC is about and is so against the rules it's not funny? Um... yeah, no. I get that twelve-year-old boys have the potential to be total sociopaths (I was one, after all), but it seems doubtful that it'd be to that extent. Not in a building with a dedicated psychiatric hospital in it, anyway.

As for the prompts... I find Kitty extremely grating, but that's just my personal distaste for lolrandom humour in general and children in particular. And make no mistake - these people are children. I would no more give a child a gun than I would a refreshing glass of battery acid. Especially not one so screwed up that she collects Nitro-9.

There are issues here. Distinct issues. And they're not just the ones your agents evidently have.

However, there is hope.

We don't have a huge amount of stories detailing the Nursery - or, for that matter, agent training (what there is of it). If they were placed there, and we got stories from that kind of perspective, with other agents who are actually of age to go on missions teaching them how to work on missions and charge properly and not just be lolrandom and shooty, then we'd have a decent series on our hands. Watching Kitty and Kay grow up, and grow as people, would be a good story arc for both of them.

But going on missions as they are?

Sorry, cob. Can't see it.