Subject: Hm...
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Posted on: 2015-05-24 18:49:00 UTC
Someone's talking about you, Rashida.
Yes, Skarmory and I planned that one. It's a minor thing, but it's something. That was almost English.
Subject: Hm...
Author:
Posted on: 2015-05-24 18:49:00 UTC
Someone's talking about you, Rashida.
Yes, Skarmory and I planned that one. It's a minor thing, but it's something. That was almost English.
I was gonna wait a bit longer after Tawaki and TM's mission, but I've been meaning to post this one today and I hope it doesn't overshadow that one. So on that note, everyone, I hope you don't mind "A Bad Taste In The Mouth"!
This is a pretty good mission. Just like with your Five Nights collab mission, you did well in ensuring that someone who does not know the canon (e.g., yours truly) can follow the mission and understand what went wrong. And I'm getting intrigued as to what's going to happen to Rashida.
Of course, there are a few errors in the mission:
“So, Suta was part of Gonza’s pack?” asked Rashida, ducking just as Falchion buzzed her.
“Wait, who’s pack?” the giant pterosaur asked,
That should read, "whose pack".
“According to the words, its supposed to be Heart who blushed faintly and picked up his sleeping son in his arms, and not Umasou,” said Ripper.
"words" should be capitalized.
And regarding the Word Cyclone: Word Cyclones occur when there are run-on sentences, not when there is a lack of paragraph breaks. You might want to do something else with that scene, especially since that Cyclone is only used to lead to the mission.
Nice work, buddy. Glad we got through this with our sanity intact. May you keep it through the hassle of juggling...oh, gosh, five RCs' worth of agents now, is it?
The other agents will have secondary roles for the most part, as supporting characters or extras.
Same here! It was fun while it lasted. :D
but how do you write text over links here? Sorry, I know it's completely offtop, but I sometimes can really be clueless when it comes to the Internet stuff.
It's the same way you do in HTML: *link text*, sans asterisks.
I've forgotten most of my HTML since high school. :D
Also, if it doesn't offend you, when could I possibly expect any form of Beta? This week? This weekend? I don't want to rush you, just need to know when I can manage some time to look at it.
Although, from what I can see, we have a six hours difference between us, so the earliest reply I can give will be ten to eleven hours from now.
Someone's talking about you, Rashida.
Yes, Skarmory and I planned that one. It's a minor thing, but it's something. That was almost English.
That throwaway line from that mission? This is the context for it. Sort of. And once again, thanks for the inspiration!