Subject: *puts on hat*
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Posted on: 2015-05-02 16:31:00 UTC

As before, all my earlier points stand: You have interesting characters, you've been around long enough that I feel I have a good idea of what you're like, and you can tell a story. As for your SPaG?

Very good this time. I did notice a few minor typos, but it's infinitely much better than last time. One thing I will flag up is that you seem to like bolding words when your characters speak to add emphasis. You might want to try avoiding that, but otherwise well done. So, it is my pleasure to say Permission granted!

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