...the people who have taken on a legendary badfic! Hail the ones who have the courage to face these monsters!

I did not see the Time Lord emergency transformation coming, so good job!

Was the pony Rina saw in Medical Dr Kindheart? Because that'd be pretty funny.

Hm, perhaps Ari and Rina should start a 'got turned nonhuman after badfic' club.

Honestly, I'm still surprised that anyone had the guts to take on Rose Potter in the first place, so the fact that it's all done just feels weird. Absolutely beautiful job, on the whole string of things. Normally, I'd say I can't wait to see what you put out next, but I think you've earned a nice, long break.

I thought I'd brought up "Find" when I had not. Thanks to Undo there's no damage done, but I think you meant to post the read-only version.

However, I do see now how the transformation into a Time Lady could be a source of character development rather than a power-up...

There's the body-horror angle. Her mind doesn't expect her body to be different, especially her sensory system.

She'll have to leave her past behind. No one who knew her before, and doesn't now know about the PPC, would believe that this completely different-looking girl is Rina. That includes family, friends...

The possibility of a TARDIS is interesting, but I'm wondering: Does she have to get one? Would she be able to learn how to use it? A Time Lady without a TARDIS might be more interesting to write simply because it hasn't been done very often.

The reality of presumably having regenerations left could change things too. It might mean that in a dangerous situation where somebody's going to die, Rina'd have to step up. Ouch.

Of course regenerations aren't infallible. Destroy the brain, or kill someone very suddenly, and they're probably not coming back. Even worse is the prospect of dying somewhere in a dangerous environment where you wouldn't be found for, say... an hour or so. Oh, you'd die all right--repeatedly. If you couldn't keep your head enough to decide not to regenerate in those circumstances (and does Rina know enough about her new biology to know how she'd even begin doing that?), you'd be in for an exceedingly nasty end. Even if you were rescued halfway through, you'd probably be in serious trouble, with your biology badly messed up.

And then there's the problem of having to deal with other Time Lords... though you seem to have already covered that. :)

“I’ll be damned,” muttered Owen under his breath. “Rookie Zeb actually survived a Legendary badfic. I knew he had it in him when I met him at Rudi’s-- kid’s got an Aura like a Pyroar.” He paused at the end of the hallway. Let’s see... there’s a staircase in front of us... two RCs with odd numbers facing each other on the left... Right. We need to turn right here. He turned the corner and looked at his partner who was sluggishly plodding alongside him. “How about you, Buck? What d’you think about Zebby-Zeb?”

“I don’t know, really. I can’t remember him that well,” replied Buck, “but maybe I was just... falling... asleep...” The Skiddo yawned out the last few words as his eyes closed in preparation for a catnap. The Pokémon ground to a halt in the middle of the Generic Grey hallway, snoring gently.

“Hey now. No falling asleep when there’s a letter to be delivered,” said Owen, poking Buck’s nose with a folded-up sheet of paper. When the Skiddo started moving forward again the Lucario cleared his throat. “Okay. Final check. How does this sound like to you...” Owen squinted at his letter. “Dear Rookie,” he read.

“Sounds condescending.”

“Well, he is a newbie, right? ‘Congratulations on marathoning that mess of a mission. You’ve got Guts-- note the capital G-- and I like that in a ‘mon. I can tell you’re going to go far.'”

“I’m pretty sure he has Intimidate.”

“Quiet, you.”

“Well, you asked me for opinions...”

“Whatever. ‘I’m not sure if you remember this but I offered you a free training session with me when we met at Rudi’s. I’d like to extend that offer again and see what you’re made of. Signed, Owen, DIA.’ Eh? Is it good?”

“Did we really meet him? Was that even canon?”

“What are you even talking about? Of course it’s ‘canon’! You remember, don’t you? Zeb went for a walk with Maxwell and then we followed him and then Victoria hauled us back to Ben and then we had to respond to that Judoon thing...”

“Iunno, I was feeling sleepy back then...”

The Lucario executed the Double Facepaw Manoeuvre and muttered something to the effect of “Never mind.” He briskly marched towards RC 3-Apple-14’s door, crouched, and slid the letter under the door. Owen made his way back to Buck and gave the snoozing Mount Pokémon a quick tap on the horns. “All right, we’re done here. Let’s move.”

Well, that was... not entirely unexpected.
Also: Hooray! Voldemort Junior, the greatest and most evil witch of all time, is dead for good! I guess the stories kinda acted liked Horcruxes for her: you had to kill each one before finishing her off.
Oh, and SPOILERS FOLLOW:





Rina's death parallels Harry's, in a way. Her death led directly to Rose/Voldemort's demise. And, of course, she survived. Much happiness! ^_^

Just stealing this SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS SPOILERS

To be honest, I was a bit worried at the end of the mission. But after reading the interlude - Very well done indeed. (Nesh says it much better than I can.)

I wish my agents were there to help with the cleanup. Alas, they aren't, and I'm not on spring break.

HG

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... Hopefully that's enough to fill up the preview space. Some of you, uh, didn't quite do that. ^^; Therefore, I was spoiled sufficiently that I got worried and spoiled myself fully by looking at the interlude first, just to see if I had understood correctly.

I had.

I was initially very concerned about Rina's transformation, considering how this particular plot device has been handled in the past. BUT! I am very pleased to say my concerns were unfounded. Iximaz, please accept my heartfelt congratulations for taking an old idea and making it better, faster, stronger than it was before. You really did your homework, and I found myself laughing several times after I'd finished reading and gone about my business as I realized exactly how long you've been planning this. I am very, very impressed.

My only real issue was the lack of closure for the Potterverse, but since Skarmory's setting up an interlude for just that purpose, I think it'll be okay. And heck, it makes sense. Your agents took a good and proper beating. They can't really be expected to handle it themselves. They've done enough, poor things!

I might suggest building up Rose Potter's growing awareness of the agents a bit more in the last few parts, though. She's pretty angry and confrontational with them when she spots them, but apart from one scene that I can recall (when she's telling the story of the graveyard to the Gryffindors), she hasn't really shown much awareness that anything is out of place in her world up until then, so it comes out of the blue a little.

Other than that, you've shown a great ability for planning things out and properly foreshadowing them, so again, my most hearty congratulations on a job well done! ^^

~Neshomeh

The non-spoiler part first: hooray, she's dead! I just read 4-6 in four hours (between other things, don't worry), and the way Rose just kept building and building... yeah, that was quite a ride. Eesh.

Also: and here was me thinking one mission a week on Driftwood was high-speed writing...

And the spoilers. I'm gonna hand over to Morgan for this one.

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Morgan drummed her fingers on her TARDIS' console, looking between the two messages. The Librarian's note had actually arrived before the Notary's, probably because the Notary had taken the time to add references in triplicate for everything she'd said.

"This is going to be fun for the Reader," Morgan said aloud. "At least I think she's still holding down Topaz Monitor, right? Though she didn't do much with that Ceka woman..."

She trailed off, then glanced around the TARDIS. "Right. No-one here. I need to get myself a companion." She eyed the Librarian's message, then pulled up the ICEP address book. "Dives, Rina... partnered with Zeb. So at least she's got that covered."

Morgan drummed her fingers again, then abruptly closed all three windows and pulled the lever to open the doors. "The D.O.R.K.S.," she muttered as she headed out, "always the D.O.R.K.S. We should've had that thing banned ages back..."

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Morgan is available for conversations, and promises not to bite. Unless the Guardsman is mentioned.

And now I have to run. ^_^

hS

*insert generic clapping gif here because the one I wanted to post has already been used*
Congratulations on killing this thing! I... Don't think I have any gifts that are good enough for you. But at least, please take this fully realistic hologram of a kitten and a puppy playing together. The best kind of eye bleach I could find.
Also, good luck on the cleanup team. :P


SPOILERS AHEAD!


I was expecting Rose to fight back because of both her ridiculous overpoweredness and the fact that she seemed to remember her death(s), but... That was definitely surprising. I'd say it's handled pretty well, though. A lot of people would just have written it as "Hey, cool, I'm super speshul with awesome powers now!" Hell, I would probably have written it that way. I'm not really good with that kind of stuff. :P

Your poor, poor Agents. *just hugs them forever*

(Also, best Harry Potter GIF ever!)

Congratulations! Even though I probably just got a bunch of spoilers for Half-blood Prince!

Oh yeah, speaking of which...

SPOILERS AHOY! BEWARE! BEWARE!


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I don't quite understand why you decided to make Rina a Time Lady via Zeb and the DORKS. For one thing, I thought the DORKS was basically a portable disguise generator and any changes wore off when you returned to HQ. For another...convenient transformation is oddly convenient. I almost wanna call borderline Sue on Rina, but since she's you and we don't insult authors here, I won't.

Zeb, if you're reading this, I really hope you know what you got yourself into, buddy. *gives basket full of berries and Poffins*

Not only did I not expect you to finish so soon, but the finale and the aftermath were just... wow. I'd comment on the whole lot of it, but I fear for spoilers.

Anyway, congrats on finishing off the whole damn thing! And y'know, maybe I should write an interlude with Rayner and E.V.L. helping to clean up after this whole mess and learning about what happened. Heck, maybe we could write it together (with my agents happening upon Zeb and volunteering), just to round out the whole damn thing and tie off any remaining loose ends!

As a reward for your bravery, I'd like for Rina to have a scimitar forged from a Skarmory feather and for Zeb to have a Razor Fang! Falchion sends his regards for both. ;)

Must go check that out; I only finished Part 4...I think it was today? I've been mostly reading them on the bus (and off the bus, too). Many compliments should come your way :) I've also noticed the occasional typo or the like (quite understandable), but reading on a phone on a bus doesn't really lend itself to noting them down. I'm pretty sure Part 4 had a case of 'ws' instead of 'was'; that's probably the easiest to find.

Seriously, Ix, I've been sitting on this for a while now, and you should know: your PPC writing is really very good, and I enjoy reading it (this is for Rose Potter and also for that Tonks' daughter mission you did just before). I mean, RP does start to drag a little in some places, but I think that's mostly to do with the source material. So. Well done. You are awesome, especially for all the Rose Potter missions.

...which I shall now catch up on. Wow. I am very impressed by the fact you've finished them and the short timeframe is making me both o.O and suspicious, how did you manage that? and basically, yes, Part 5 here I come.

/hands Swiss Bleepolate/ You probably need rather a lot of that...

~DF

Uh...

Can't say I expected this outcome. At all.

I applaud you for your success in this endeavor.

As it was promised, here's the reward for finishing this horrendous voyage:

1) A fully charged Deputy Green Lantern Ring, but that cannot be re-charged, with only one charge and will turn to dust once it's used up.

2) A Kryptonian DNA-based empowering pill from the Injustice: The Regime DCU sub-continuum, increases your physical might by 10,000 times for 24 hours.

May they be of use for all your endeavors, Agents Rina Dives and Zeb... *tips hat and dissappears into the shadows*

I just finished copying all of the mission parts into one document. This mission is, when all compiled together: 201 pages, and 78,291 words long.

Iximaz, I want you to take a good, long look at those numbers. This mission is longer than The Philosopher's Stone. Iximaz, I want you to look at those numbers, and realize what you have done. You have, essentially, wrote a novel. In a little over a month. This is a major accomplishment.

As I said before, I will be reading all of it tonight, and commenting on it tomorrow. I will be sure to be on the final doc tomorrow to congratulate and discuss how it all went. However, no matter what I think, no matter how well received this mission is, I want you to know how proud of you I am. I envy your speed and skill as a writer, and I look forward to whatever else you write.

Congratulations, Iximaz, on your first novel.

Here's a dump truck I "acquired". It is full of Bleeprin. From what I understand you probably need it now.

And by "acquired" I mean borrowed with every intention of returning. But the garage I borrowed it from collapsed when something that was most definitely not the dump truck I was st...borrowing.

Now I will actually go through and read the whole series in the next few days.

It's official, you're free cookie rights have been revoked.

Also, yay! More Rina and Zeb! (I love them