Subject: Oh.
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Posted on: 2015-03-24 23:23:00 UTC
Well, not that it's not normal, per se, but it doesn't fit with Rina's character, especially at that particular moment in time. I strive for realistic dialogue, not to show off my admittedly grandiose lexicon. :P I do like to use big words just for kicks, but when you're upset, what do you say, "Aw man!" or "I find this situation to be highly displeasing."? (
I have no idea how I managed it, but here you go, everyone!
I swear to Rowling I have a life outside the PPC! *sweatdrops and runs off to start on Part 6*
Seriously, I envy your persistence. I probably would've attempted to pull a Division of Multiple Offenses in the first book if I'd tried to tackle that...thing.
Rose Potter: where carving words into your hand is Dark Magic, but carving words into your best friend's forehead is perfectly normal.
Oh, and I love this bit:
“Can we charge for being trigger-happy and a complete nutjob? I think we can,” Rina said, noting it down.
“You realize you just described over half the PPC?”
“Oh, shut up.”
Rose Potter is just... absolutely insane. There really were no words to describe the horror she inflicted upon poor Ron.
That was one of my favorite parts to write. :3
This is me the entire time I'm sporking Rose Potter:
Or, rather, have not seen. I think I see a dude in there, but... Man. Iximaz, I would scrap this one, if I were you.
... Who am I kidding? Why would you even want to be fair with that abomination? This just requires high-temperature termination with extreme prejudice.
Anyway, I love those missions... That mission? Whatever. I'm eagerly waiting for the grand finale! :P
Glad to know you're enjoying it! Like I said, the grand finale will be at 12:00 p.m. EST, so... yeah, hope you like that, too! :3
I intended to do the workshop exercise today, and there you come and distract me again :-)
Also, how dare Moody for not bowing to her?
Does "for" really belong there?
Rina solved his dilemma by putting down her notebook holding her hand out for the wated to sniff.
"and" missing between "notebook" and "holding"?
PS: I love the wated.
I’m more concerned with the fact that Rose is able to get away with attacking high-ranking Ministry officials like this and get away with it,
This may be intentional, showing how furious Rina is, and nothing seems impossible at this point. But getting away and getting away with it may be a bit much?
HG
I mean, I didn't learn that golden rule in time, and look what happened. XD
As for the third proofreading, I think a better way to word it would be, "I'm more concerned with the fact that Rose is able to attack high-ranking Ministry officials like this with impunity." Because that last word sounds a bit stronger and knowing Rose, I suppose that's a plus.
Don't worry, after Part 6, I'm gonna take a bit of a break from writing missions.
But I think I'll keep it the way it is. I mean, unless you suffer from Sesquipedalian Loquaciousness, not many people use 'impunity' in casual conversation.
Or did I end up posting that as a response to the wrong thread?
Well, not that it's not normal, per se, but it doesn't fit with Rina's character, especially at that particular moment in time. I strive for realistic dialogue, not to show off my admittedly grandiose lexicon. :P I do like to use big words just for kicks, but when you're upset, what do you say, "Aw man!" or "I find this situation to be highly displeasing."? (
Well at least sometimes. Though more than likely it would look something like this "Censored censored! Son censored censored censored censored censored duck. Censored!"
Courtesy link for those who wonder WTH those two words mean.
Part 6 is already done and ready to go tomorrow, too, so no break for you! :P
Oops, no it doesn't!
Right, will add.
(I love the wated too. The typo made me laugh so hard- I mean, how do you confuse 'wallet' with 'wated'?)
Whoops, that would be my own Angrish showing. Fixed, fixed, aaand fixed!
Didn't you say somewhere that after this you are doing "Little Miss Mary"? Are you TRYING to die or something?
Nah, after LMM, I think I'll be done with Legendaries. Believe it or not, I do value what little sanity I have left.
No proofreading errors that I seem to have noticed this time. I eagerly await the grand finale!
Though, Rose remembering that the agents killed her? That's not what I'd call a good sign...
I can't wait until tomorrow. Noon won't come fast enough.
And yeah, Rose is... well, you'll see. >:)
At this rate I expect that this monstrosity will finally be put to rest within a week.
The excess of plagiarism makes my job a lot easier, mercifully.
I'll have it posted at 12:00 Eastern Standard Time, so... yeah. Be ready and keep an eye out!
I'll be checking if it shows up exactly at 12:00 EST. If it doesn't, I am revoking your rights for free cookies.
Don't worry, I'll be eagerly awaiting noon tomorrow to post! :3
Since it's taken from something that is already good to begin with, it is made "slightly" less painful, but not by much.
Just hang in there, must a little longer.
I have not read the mission yet, nor will I, until the final death. I will then read every mission in a row and comment on them all as one giant mission. So, consider this additional motivation.
At this rate, the series will be finished wither tomorrow or the day after. :D
I would be almost through Starfleet Magic 3, with two missions from Jumper on the side.
I look forward to seeing how this turns out.
...that she DOES, in fact, have a life outside of the PPC. She just has a crazy determination to kill this horrible series. Anyway, fantastic work!