I've just started reading the 'fic (inspired to do so by reading the mission), and... well, words fail me. Rose Potter is just the worst.
I did notice while reading that Neville was momentarily turned spherical ('the round boy'), which the Agents didn't pick up on. I guess there's enough chargeworthy stuff that a little thing like that doesn't matter.
And another thing... does Zeb have Intimidate? Because I think that might help lessen the impact of Rose's Sueper-strength. (Ugh, that portmanteau seemed like a better idea before I typed it...)
Anyway, I salute your determination in taking on this awful travesty, and I'm looking forward to the next part.

...and just you wait; the "Druids" use portals, there are mellyrn in Potterverse now, the big reveals occur halfway through the stories, and Rose Potter makes Tom Riddle look empathetic and compassionate by comparison! She deserves to have logic set in in her despite when Hedwig perches on her shoulder!

I trust you have five different demises planned for the other fics?

...and I, for one, am glad that I've never actually taken the time to read the original. Arceus's majestic hat hair, those excerpts are just horrible.

I'd be happy to have my DMS team volunteer to help (I know Rayner would love to take a bite out of Rose Potter, and E.V.L. would be happy to revisit one of the continua she invaded when she was still a badfic character), but I'm sorry to say that I myself literally cannot be of any use at this time. After my next mission with these two and the next interlude for my Floaters team, I'll have to drop out of writing PPC stuff until Spring Break, for two big reasons: a guest lecture in Indianapolis at the end of February, and my final dissertation defense in early March. I've been working my tail off almost nonstop to prepare for both of them, and I don't think I'll be getting any breaks anytime soon.

If it's any comfort, I could take a raincheck for a future collab between your DMS team and mine. Anyway, good luck with the rest of these, and Falchion wants you to know that he's keeping his talons crossed that Rina will turn out okay. *virtual hug*

I'd volunteer my agents to help, if needed, but I'm afraid Nume's having none of it. He's preparing to board up the RC door as we speak, Ilraen's protests and the likelihood of injuring himself in the process be damned. {= P

I suppose there's Derik and Gall, but I don't think you'd really want them along. They'd probably create more problems than they solved.

Still, FicPsych stands ready to provide your agents with the psychiatric care they'll undoubtedly need. Emergency in-fic intervention is also doable.

In honor of those about to spork, we salute thee!

~Neshomeh

Did I mention you were mad? Because you are absolutely stark staring flibble. I wouldn't want to take even the first Rose Potter fic on with my agents in a month of Mondays, let alone all six. You are a machine.

Agent Rina, please accept this elegant and finely-crafted designer briefcase. Don't be surprised at the weight, it has first edition hardbacks of all seven Harry Potter books inside and they get quite weighty, as I'm sure you're aware. Agent Zeb... well, what to get for the Luxray who has everything? I've got some Rectangles Of Dubious Legality And Origin if you want more variety in your moveset, but I wanted to give you the full set and I haven't finished it yet. Lessee... ooh! I know!

Zeb used Substitute!

That was... uh. Yeah, that's a badfic I'm really glad I've never read.

(You'll be glad to know the Canon Librarian screeched in actual pain inside my head when Inheritance got destroyed; I had to go back and confirm that it's described as Zeb's copy, not a borrowed one)

I liked the relatively low-key kill at the end of this one; it's both appropriate (countering Miss Overpowered with simple blunt-force trauma), and sets up for harder and harder kills as the series goes on.

(Have you read Kippur's missions into the Marrissa Picard series? It's one of the few instances of repeat-kills I'm aware of, so it might be interesting for you. Oh, and I guess technically my Al and Death mission/s count; the two halves were written separately, but the second piece was only very short, and is now tacked onto the end)

hS

You will do all six parts? I’m looking forward to this.

Some nitpicks though:

Rose answered all of Snape’s answers perfectly.
Who asked all the questions then?

the scrambled to find empty seats
You probably meant they.

promptly and expertly redressed the wound the wound on Snape’s leg
and
even all the the way across the pitch
and
a portal to the Room of Requirement room
Somebody call the Repititive Department of Repetition, please.

Rose was trying to decide if she wanted to let Hermione swear on her druidic amulet so she could see Rose naked all the time.
I’m confused. Does the amulet, after Hermione swore on it, allow Hermione to see through Rose’s clothes? This doesn’t match what I concluded from the scene where McGonagall explained the Travelling Aid amulet. Apparently it allows Rose to travel without much luggage, enabling her to summon or conjure all the clothes she wants to wear in a weird druidic ritual that requires undressing before the new clothes can be summoned? Did an attempt to avoid giving us too much information result in not giving us enough information about what this amulet really does? You should keep in mind that, although the badfic is legendary, somebody may read this unspoiled.

HG

I don't see it as very problematic for Neville to have a learning disability, actually.

A lot of his trouble definitely comes from lack of confidence, but that isn't incompatible with a learning disability.

Neville's got the typical jagged skill profile of someone with a specific learning disability--he's way better at some subjects than others, as you can see when you see Neville in Herbology vs. Charms, for example. That kind of skill gap is common for real-life people with things like dyslexia or dyscalculia.

Neville definitely blossoms by the end of his schooling, especially since he learns to concentrate on his strengths. It becomes obvious that he's not universally a slow learner; he has weaknesses that he has to work around, like his lack of confidence and the trouble he has with paying attention to details and keeping track of complex things in his mind. I don't think he would have a learning disability in a Muggle school; maybe he'd lean toward inattentive-type ADHD, but that'd be about it.

Anyways, that doesn't really justify the way this fic treats Neville. The writer gives Neville this old magical injury, an old curse that suppressed his magic and gave him this learning disability. And then, once Rose Potter is in the picture, she essentially cured him all at once, just like that. There's no personal growth for Neville learning how to cope with his problems and his lack of confidence. There's no working around weaknesses. They're just taken away. Neville with a disability is unacceptable to Rose Potter, so Rose Potter takes the disability away. Shy, clumsy Neville just isn't good enough for her, even though he was plenty good enough for Harry Potter. Unfortunate implications much?

Really now, this is just awful. The fic that is, the mission is top notch. Rina steadily losing her sanity has been a fun trip. Question though: why kill her multiple times instead of throwing her to the Department of Repeat Offenders?

She DELIBERATELY offs Quirrel!? And of COURSE she's a hitherto unheard-of form of Metamorphmagus with Speshul abilities

I trust the amulet will be completely destroyed in the end? I mean, this is one sick story!!!!!

Brain.exe rebooting now.

Just... WTF?!?!?

Did the Suethor even think about what is actually plausible?! WHY did she decide to shoehorn ninja skills in; isn't being a wizard Speshul enough?!
And riddle me this, Suethor:
How could Rose possibly have learned ninja skills; the Dursleys would not have let her!
If Rose is a ninja, then why is she staying with the Dursleys? She could, for example, survive in the forest! (And that would only serve to increase how formidable of a person she is.)
And why does Dudley even bully her, since bullies only pick on those who cannot fight back!

And that's just the first few paragraphs!

*breathes hard*

Iximaz, I salute your high tolerance for BS.

Ugh, what could possess someone to even write this?!
*headwall*

Query, though: Am I misreading, or am I to assume that Rose goes everywhere in the buff?

Good luck with the rest of the series. Let's hope that Agent Rina, unable as she is to indulge in any Bleep, doesn't become indisposed soon after!

*offers Full Restore for Zeb and Butterbeer for Rina.*
Here. You'll need it.

A few errors:
1) Zeb’s keen ears still caught what she said.

“Damn rookie…”

You should replace that period after "she said" with a colon.

2) Polkiesses
Mini-Aragog. Remove that first E; it should be "Polkisses".

3) reigning in the electricity
Homophone error. Remove the G; it should be "reining in".

4) It’s to show how calm and collected she in in the face of danger!
I believe you meant to say "how calm and collected she is in the face of danger"?

5) Zeb, his eyes watering and wishing desperately he could burn his nose off to be rid of the smell, just nodded.
Zeb's eyes were wishing? Some rewording might be needed here. Consider this: "Zeb just nodded as his eyes watered; he was desperately wishing that he could burn his nose off to be rid of the smell."

6) mass neutralization
I believe you meant to say "mass neuralyzation"?

Kark me sideways, I never thought someone would tackle a badfic this long.
-Bow-
You have my respect, Milady Iximaz!

That said, there's a small case of Dog Latin in the mission: in Nudatio is not Latin. The correct (ablative) form is in nudos, and even that is highly irregular (and, since Latin is a Classical language, frowned upon).

(He totally had one.) I noticed a lot of places with one more blank line than usual, you might want to get rid of those. Not where it means a scene break, though, there it's good.

You're right, it is less interesting to read the book in first person. Especially with a stupid ninja-druid-whatever-the-f*ck Sue as the main character. Excellent work! *gently tosses Sugar Quills*

Here, it's a jar of paralytic girtablilu venom. A few milliliters of this will leave the subject on the floor and twitching for about five minutes. Three centiliters will induce permanent paralysis. A deciliter will interfere with the heart and lungs, causing death by either asphyxiation or cardiac arrest.

You have half a liter. Make it count.

That was... What do you mean, I've not read it yet? Eh, I bet it'll be awesome. I mean, the mission, not the fic.