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I definitely remember you. You and the good ole SIELU. If I recall correctly, your agent had a cameo in my Legolas-Sue smiting ceremony.

Well, there've been some changes around here, but if you lost all of your old links, I can think of a good place to start.

All paragraphs have a one space indent? That's weird. I just checked the gdoc the beta was done in, and there are a few odd lines with a one space indent (bad me; I should've spotted 'em) but most are fine. How peculiar.

I do remember you, but from how far back I couldn't say. Welcome back, anyway!

hS

I'm one of the latter category, I think. I don't remember your username, anyway. However, it's lovely to see you.

Have a bag of pebbles and a Random Shiny Object as a welcome -back gift.

No, don't take those three. These are my Agents.
I've been here for four months or so, so we don't know each other. I'm in charge (lol) of Agents Whatever, South, and Krisprolls, three Norwegian tall ships.

Nice mission.
Some nitpicks.

All the paragraphs have a one space indentation. I only noticed the indentation on my second look at story. I don't think it's necessary to indent when leaving a blank line between paragraphs.

“You’re my new partner, then?” she asked cheerfully, ignoring how naked she was.

“Nadine Moreno,” she said awkwardly, nodding.

Two things here: (1) in both sentences a "she" is referred to, both they are two different people. A little more distinction would be nice. (2) "Ignoring how naked she was" is Jodi's POV, while up to that point everything had been Nadine's POV. Some people (I imagine mainly those that have read a lot about keeping POVs consistent) would find such a switch jarring. (It's much later that Nadine notices she can follow her partner's POV, which I find a great escape for POVs that sometimes wander.)

Guessing that she was finished getting dressed, Nadine turned around and saw her sitting on the edge of one of the bookshelves.

Blame my high-school education for this one: whenever I see "she" I think the antecedent is the last female mentioned previously. In this case Nadine. Which made this sentence confusing on first reading it. Changing "she" with Jodi or the girl would sort that.

“Hey, if you’re going to clean for me, it’s fine with me,” Jodi said. Nadine smiled slightly, and nodded.

“Do you know when we’re going on our next mission?” she asked, sitting back on the bed and pulling off her boots. Her partner grinned.

The people that say, "start a new paragraph when a new person starts speaking" are not entirely right. A new paragraph can (should, depending on how strict you are) start when a new person starts acting or speaking. Which means that when a person first acts and then says something then that can be done in the same paragraph. In the above example:

“Hey, if you’re going to clean for me, it’s fine with me,” Jodi said.

Nadine smiled slightly, and nodded. “Do you know when we’re going on our next mission?” she asked, sitting back on the bed and pulling off her boots.

Her partner grinned. (...)

Could you make direct quotes from the fic stand out in some way (putting them in italics, bracketting them, opening the paragraph with a minus sign) so that a distinction can be made between what you wrote and what came from the fic?

After the impostors are apprehended Nadine seems to take charge of the situation and Jodi, her more experienced partner, just waits around for her. This seems unlikely for a seasoned agent and a cat-person. I imagine neither to be good at following orders. Waiting impatiently because their partner had run off with the equipment they needed, that I can imagine.

And a Mark III K-9!

Welcome back.

I am definitely a newer person and thus not known. I suffer from a bad habit of organizing things. :D

You definitely don't know me -- I arrived about a year ago.

But I used to go as Eternal Newb.

I have no idea who the heck you are! Let's be friends!

I also fall into the latter category.

But I'm rather fond of this one

Fandom: X-com
Author: Hobbes
Title: X-com, The Unknown Menace
Link:http://www.fanfiction.net/s/245417/1/XCOMTheUnknown_Menace

Hellga is responsible for Agent Lambda and the Special Interdepartmental Elven Languages Unit, or SIELU.

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~Neshomeh

Oh, wow! Hi! I remember you! I was but a wee newbie back then, though. Welcome back!

*offers hugs and Galadriel™ brand lembas*

~Neshomeh

Oh, well. Nice to meet you, and welcome back! :)

Actually, though, not all Ben and Jerry's stuff is fair trade either. Some of it is, though. *shrug* Most of the stuff around here is rather expensive, and harder to reach than regular chocolate, but I figure if it's a choice between being out of chocolate and supporting slave labor... eh, yeah. Turns out I'm not as addicted as I thought.

And really? Green & Black's is my favorite brand, bar none. Well, except Divine Treasures, which is a local vegan brand, but overall, definitely Green & Black's. I think the bitterness with the darker ones is part of why I like it.

It has quite literally been years, but I was re-reading some old favorite fanfic while on vacation (of a relaxing kind, for a change) and remembered the good old days. :)

The fact that my hard drive died about a year a half ago taking down all my links and saved files with it helped me disappear from old haunts too...

Anyway, hello again to those I used to know, and hello to those I have never met (seems to be a majority of you).

Sorry, the phrasing was unclear. I meant, why not nag every author and community we know to do the same thing?

Where there's an established relationship but it's not ABOUT the relationship.

Yeah, when I saw that fic on the Unclaimed Badfic list, I went, "That has to be a troll. Right? It *must die.*" I'm glad you thought my agents were interesting; I've had Jodi floating around in my head for over a year now, unnamed, but Nadine is a bit newer. Hopefully, the next missin will take less time for me to get around to putting up than this one.