And we see yet another Boarder overcome the shackles of an old shame. Good work, Rina!

However, there are a few things amiss with the mission:

1) In this segment, it takes a while to figure out who said what in the middle paragraph:

"Ooh, I wanna be in Hufflepuff!" Randa said. Rina looked at her.

"...said nobody in the history of forever," she said slowly. Randa kicked at her. "Ow! Randa, you know I didn't mean that!" Rina rubbed her shin. "I like Hufflepuffs too, come on!"

"Hufflepuff," Randa said firmly.

I eventually figured out that all of the quotes in the middle paragraph are Rina's lines, but the paragraphing threw me off. (You have Rina react at the end of the first paragraph, then start a new paragraph with a quote, so I expected a change in speaker back to Randa. The "she" in the paragraph muddied the water even more. Only the context of the rest of the paragraph cleared everything up.) Please allow me suggest a fix:

"Ooh, I wanna be in Hufflepuff!" Randa said.

Rina looked at her. "...said nobody in the history of forever," she said slowly.

Randa kicked at her.

"Ow! Randa, you know I didn't mean that!" Rina rubbed her shin. "I like Hufflepuffs too, come on!"

"Hufflepuff," Randa said firmly.

This way, it's a lot clearer who said what.

2)
A horrible smell hit them just then; Rina peered out into the corridor. "Here comes Peter," she said, one hand pressed over her nose, "and he's covered in Stinksap." ...

Randa couldn't keep the grin off her face. "So, what have we learned here about proof reading?"

Rina stuck her tongue out.

Unless the Stinksap is something that a Harry Potter fan should know about, I'm guessing that it's the result of a spelling error in the Words. Please tell me what the context is.

Either way, not too shabby a mission.

Rina and Randa are right, by the way; that foreshadowing is kind of unsubtle. (Also, I was confused when Rina used the DORKS to restore her disguise. When did the disguise drop?)

And...oh my Din, you're doing My Inner Life? Can I help in any possible capacity? I want to help Hyrule too!

It's pretty awesome, and it shows a good deal of courage to go through an old shame and have to read it critically, usually with a stiff drink and a therapist nearby.

One thing that struck me was that the D.O.R.K.S unit disguised itself as a copy of Magical Me, which seemed odd considering this is set in the Marauder era and the book wasn't published until the autumn of 1992. But then I realised; that's exactly the kind of totally minor deviation from canon that wouldn't upset the Words at all but a PPC agent would definitely notice. Good job. =]

Rina's pain is so palpable I can't stop cringing. It makes for a unique mission, though, particularly the acknowledgments of when you did learn from your mistakes (and when you tried without understanding what actually made a Sue). Plus the resulting back-and-forth with the Agents is a lot of fun.

The mission was very fun to read, though as a lover of terrible puns I didn't mind the Sirius/serious thing too much. I definitely relate to Rina's pain, though, and it's times like this I am happy none of my fics ever got past first chapters (and were all deleted years ago.)

"Are you serious?"

"Yes, I am. Oh, sorry, I thought you meant my name."

Not sure if it's funny, but it's probaby an improvement over what you had.

Why yes, I am a pun enthusiast. Puns are supposedy the lowest form of wit... but wit is the highest form of humor.

I was actually reminded of my very first PPC mission while reading this - though to be fair, I sporked that 35-chapter horror story specifically to clear my name as a writer and to give Falchion a jump-start on character development. Yours comes off as more of a "Why not tackle an old shames for spits and giggles?" kind of deal, which isn't a bad thing.

And dear Arceus, "My Inner Life"? Oh wow, you have my sympathies. *virtual hugs* Godspeed, you two, and may you have Farore's blessing (and a firm grip on your sanity!)!