Subject: Just read it. And I loved it, too.
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Posted on: 2014-11-20 09:37:00 UTC
Nothing more to say here.
I don't actually read LotR (*ducks to avoid flying objects*) so I just have to pick up on what these fics are about.
Wait... blarg, what day it is? Okay, looks like it's still Wednesday out over the Pacific, so I haven't missed it.
PPC: Driftwood - Thorin's Little Princess
In which simply adding more abilities is seen not to substitute for actually making use of them.
Not taking requests this week; next chapter is an Interlude, followed by a Christmas break.
Reviews and comments are always welcome - as are typo catches! There's usually a couple in there...
hS
On the phone, still, but super neat to see him! Given that Dawn and I are working on the mission that spurs him and Gurnirel to join SIELU, it's pretty entertaining.
Other than that, very nicely done. There was a bit that was confusingly worded:
"Um... that if she had any character at all she'd be a flaming Suvian?"
I think you meant "she wouldn't be a flaming Suvian", since Suvians lack character, which Kaitlyn and Selene pointed out later.
Also there's the paragraph after "Fire rained down on Dale" which needs capitalisation, and I think you're also missing a couple dashes between the two paragraphs in general.
But that's all that I found weird. I especially liked the constructive criticism at the end; clearly this fic had a lot more potential.
I needed a SIELU agent who wasn't Ramwe-the-Inscrutible, and remembered Dawn had mentioned having a couple of Caliquendi in there... it took me longer than I expected to track down the names, though (particularly since, er, they were in like the second thread down the Board at the time...)
The 'flaming Suvian' thing - they actually said it right. She has literally no character - no lusting, no hating, no nothing. She's nothing more than a collection of traits. Without a personality to enable actual canon-warping behaviour, she doesn't really qualify as a Suvian in my view. Seriously - everyone ignored her most of the time. It's really weird.
The thing with that 'the scene changed' double paragraph is intentional; it's an abrupt scene changed marked by a broken paragraph. That said, since two people have now flagged it up, I guess I'll add some sort of divider between them.
Thanks for the review!
hS
Just one random paragraph break spotted:
Fire rained down on Dale. The building in front of Kaitlyn crashed down, and she yelped, throwing herself back. A spark caught in her beard, spreading rapidly, and she beat at it frantically before
the scene changed, and they were suddenly in the darkness of Bag End, watching Evelynn wake with a start. The fire was gone, but Kaitlyn still ran her fingers through her beard mournfully. "It's never going to be the same again," she said.
Anyway, I enjoyed this just as much as the others, if not more. This new mission format was interesting, and I was cracking up by the end when poor Kaitlyn was speaking in voices like overly-urple similes.
And the Andalite/Animorph mixup reminded me do much of my mom. She could never keep the two straight despite constant 'Animorph are animal morphers' reminders from me. So I found that extremely amusing.
Nice touch, having the Sue's passiveness becoming her downfall.
10/10 would read again.
Nothing more to say here.
I don't actually read LotR (*ducks to avoid flying objects*) so I just have to pick up on what these fics are about.