That was... by
Hardric
on 2015-11-17 15:56:00 UTC
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One of the most twisted, cruel, heartwarming, tearjerking and awesome thing you could do for these characters' first meeting.
You mad genius, there's Sparks who would kill for half of your brilliance, you know that?
Well... That was really awkward. XD by
James Shields
on 2015-11-17 14:38:00 UTC
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But it was also really heartfelt as well. Good job! :D
I like this by
Hieronymus Graubart
on 2015-11-17 10:03:00 UTC
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But I found a typo.
Falchion realized that one of her hands as a prosthetic ...
Should be "was".
Right away, the waitress attending the table gave all of them their menus and silverware, and Falchion began studying his with an absent-minded expression.
When I read this, I first thought that a word is missing after Falchion began studying his. But then I realized that the sentence would work in German (capitalizing and deflecting the German equivalent of his to make it a noun); so reflecting to Falchion’s menu like this may be legitimate? It still looks unfamiliar to me.
HG