Subject: Because some clown...
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Posted on: 2016-11-17 20:34:00 UTC
... forgot to revise the maps to reflect the conquests of xxx3.
hS
Subject: Because some clown...
Author:
Posted on: 2016-11-17 20:34:00 UTC
... forgot to revise the maps to reflect the conquests of xxx3.
hS
How's everyone doing? [Checks earlier thread] Okay, so 'everyone' may be about... like... two other people... hmm. [Scribbles all over plans for post; creates a new one on the fly]
For myself, I'm still Live(Journal)streaming my novel; I don't know how many people might be reading it, but if I was doing this for feedback, it wouldn't be NaNo, so that's okay. ^_^
I've also got a very entertaining (to me) world map, which does finally include Larfen's multitudinous Australias. I feel really bad that Africa and South America are both completely left out; if you can think of anything that could slot in there, I'd be delighted to consider it. We've got everything from historical resurgences to micronations writ large to silly in-jokes - plus the Kootenai Nation, which I'm pretty sure qualifies as all three.
And... I'm having fun. It's been hard to get anything written some days, and my characters have a distressing tendency to make me write around action sequences (the most recent one ended up as a flashback), but it's fun, and I'm on schedule, and NaNo rocks.
hS
Watching this developing was a lot of fun. But I’m not sure whether it holds up on a second read (no time to try right now). There may be some gaping plotholes concerning original Exeter’s way from Tex-Mex (via Imperial Russia?) to Golden Mongolia, and why he didn’t know that he had the shield in the first place.
Final Nitpicks:
Scene 25:
Dwarfed all this magnificence, a marble stair rose steeply to a gilded throne.
Apparently the missing "by" wandered off to the next sentence:
Beneath by a canopy of silver branches, clad in robes of what were probably nylon and wearing a green gem on his brow, sat the king of New Gondor.
Scene 30:
I'm pretty sure that' what I just said
Shouldn’t this be " that's"?
HG
http://www.xkcd.com/1759/
*g*
~Neshomeh
I live in GMT, but spent a good seven years over between Minas Tirith and Corbyn. Sounds legit.
hS
I can totally see him standing up for the Orcs and making the War of the Ring worse than it was.
... giving me plotbunnies when it's NaNo. >:(
hS
Well, you can put that plotbunny in the freezer until after NaNo? Your NaNovel's been a fun read, so far.
Lord Denethor stood, hands clasped behind his back, in the shade of the White Tree. He made no attempt to welcome the man in front of him, no effort to put him at ease; merely tipped his head, the merest fraction of a nod. "So. You are the famous Craban."
The man shrugged, seemingly entirely comfortable with standing in front of the Steward of Gondor unshaven, still dressed in travelling clothes. "That's what they call me," he said, his accent strange and harsh to Denethor's ear.
Not that the Steward would ever allow his distaste to show. He looked out over the White City, and the vast fertile plain of the Pelennor beyond. "It seems rumour has made your fame greater than it truly is, Master Craban," he said, allowing himself a thin smile. "No hosts of citizens turning out to greet you, whatever we may have heard."
The scruffy man smiled back, a defiant glint in his shadowy eyes. "The rich rarely welcome anyone who stands up for those they exploit... my lord."
Denethor felt his smile crystallise. "My people do not exploit one another, Master Craban," he said, locking onto the other's gaze.
Craban did not flinch away. "There's more to Gondor than Minas Tirith."
Denethor held the stare for another moment, then let it drop and turned towards the north-west. "As I well know. But you are not from Gondor, are you? You come to us out of the north - from Eriador."
Craban nodded. "Arnor, as was," he said, "and mayhap will be again."
"And in that forsaken land, your claims of abuse may hold some truth," Denethor allowed. "But this is Gondor. We are of fairer stock."
"So I have often heard, on my travels," Craban said with a slight nod. "Usually from the tongues of noble lords who care nothing for the poor and downtrodden outside their walls."
Denethor stiffened. Did this man have no sense of decorum? It seemed not - that he was unable to comprehend the Steward's subtle message. Time, then, for the sword to slip a little from its sheath. "Yes, the downtrodden. You are a great champion of the... mistreated, are you not, Master Craban?"
Craban eyed him, but nodded firmly. "That I am. All deserve a fair chance, whether they be born rich or poor."
"Indeed." Denethor turned again, facing west along the White Mountains, and held out his hand to indicate them. "Unless, of course, they happen to be Rohirrim."
The ragged man's brow furrowed deeply. "The Riders have just the same rights as any other."
"Oh?" Denethor affected an expression of polite surprise, and loosed his attack. "Then it is not true that you claim to have friends among the Dunlendings - those same wild men who daily ravage the western skirts of the Mark?"
Craban scowled as the hit went home. "There can be no peace without discourse," he said. "If Rohan wishes to put an end to the depredations of certain folk of Dunland, they must talk to them. There is no other way."
"Indeed." Denethor took the opening and thrust again, driving words of steel under the other's guard. "And I daresay the same can be said of the Orcs who even now hold all of Ithilien in their iron grasp?"
Craban bent forward a little, as if fighting against the wind - or doubling over as the Steward's sword took him in the belly. "If the goblin-kind can be brought to a treaty, surely that is better than constant war."
Denethor let his icy smile return. "If this is the wisdom of the north," he said, "then it is small wonder the kingdoms of old are no more."
Craban flinched as if physically struck, then straightened and took a deep breath. "Lord Denethor," he said, his voice firm once more, "I did not ask this audience to debate peace and war. I came on behalf of the poor among your people - to ask that you give them aid in this time of famine."
Denethor nodded sharply, angered that the Arnorian dared question his rule or try to dictate to him. "I have heard their plight," he said, "and have already acted to alleviate it. Lady Lothron - of Pelargir, Master Craban, not of the White City - has undertaken to support the nobles and merchants who are suffering. As they recover, so the poorer folk around them will be carried along with them, and all Gondor will be fairer for it."
Craban's mouth actually dropped open. "And if the rich do not choose to share their bounty?" he demanded. "What will you do then, when the people of Gondor lie dying in the streets?"
"Master Craban," Denethor snapped, "you forget your place. I rule in Gondor, not you." He reached up and touched a dry branch of the White Tree. "And Gondor endures, Master Crow. For thousands of years it has endured. When the North foundered, Gondor remained firm. My people are strong-willed; they will break this famine, it will not break them."
"Strong-willed," Craban repeated. "There is a fine line between strong-willed and stubborn, my lord Steward. Good day to you." And with no more than the most perfunctory bow, he turned on his heel and strode down into the city, leaving Denethor alone.
I have a quiz today in uni, and this set my mind at ease. It's a nice little bit of fic, if I may say.
...
I'd write "Bibi in Minas Tirith" but I don't think I can get Denethor right.
But first:
Scene 18:
I shook my head slightly, taking completely off-guard by her breezy dismissal of what I'd thought was her entire point.
Shouldn’t that be "taken"?
And then you'll need to join me in in bed and put on an enthusiastic show of making up for it.
Cheating with the word count again?
Scene 19
It was even more distressing to know that the black shield that popped into existence to effortlessly fend off Golden Monglian energy-lashes had been under my control all along, had I only know it.
Shouldn’t these be "Mongolian" and "known"?
Scene 23
You've got another thing coming if you thing you can turn me over to your government.
Tell me that this is intentional!
Well, this guy obviously doesn’t speak Japanese, so they are in New Gondor? Small doubt, because it may be too far from the Australias, but it just fits too good. It may also be New Arnor, but the big city at the mouth of a river at the eastern coast looks like Christchurch.
HG
Thanks for the other points, I'll fix them when I get the chance (despite the loss of word-count). Thank you!
As for your guess... I should have the next scene up today, so you can find out!
hS
So chances are most of the non-Mormon Christians would flee to the Tex-Mex Republic--love that name--but I'm guessing at least a few would band together. Here's that country. ^_^
It's called Antemurale Christianitatis, or just Antemurale. It originated in Kentucky, then migrated south to Alabama, and now stretches across Alabama, Georgia, and South Carolina. Antemurale has had some troubles in the past with leadership. Everyone could agree that they needed some kind of government, but no one could agree on what it should be. Finally, they decided to split themselves up by denomination and then arrange themselves like the America of old, with each denomination acting like a state within the Union.
Antemurale largely carries on the industries of the states they occupy, but there's been an astonishing upswing in conversion to the Amish way of life, so they're also known for their excellent cabins and cabinets.
-Alleb, who could not resist
Would it be possible to add to one of the American countries a mention in the likes of "Capital: Springfield. Nobody know where it is, it's always moving"? Or better, a country called Simpsonia,or something like that...
(Which, with the Tex-Mex Republic, makes four Christian nations across North America... hey, if the boot fits!)
Question: what on Earth is up with that name? I'm using it, but still: whaaaat?
Also: how's the NaNo going?
hS
We are legion.
It means "Bastion of Christianity." I found it by googling "Bastion of Christianity," since it seemed like a good fit. ^^ <a href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/AntemuraleChristianitatis">Here do be the Wiki article. Tl;dr version: It was a label applied to countries defending Europe against the Ottoman Empire.
Well... I won, actually. 0_0 I got to 50K the day before yesterday. This is my third year participating, and I have never worked so quickly. This fic practically gushed out of me. Also, apparently I need all of fifty thousand words to get me from Ithilien to Edoras, sooo I think this is gonna be a long story. But my viewpoint character is about to come down with pneumonia, so maybe I can gloss over a week or two via fever dream. NaNo! How's your NaNovel? I would read it on your LiveJournal, but from the first chapter or so--which were very well done, by the way--I think it might be a bit above my limits in terms of innuendo and such.
-Alleb
I have no regrets.
Congrats! A two-week NaNo is one of those elusive things - they happen very rarely, but when they do, you know you've really accomplished something.
As for me, I've stalled out a bit today, because I have to force them to actually do stuff instead of sitting around arguing. :-/ Dang plot.
I'm not sure whether Gravity's Embrace is above your limits or not, really. The innuendo sticks around, but it never gets any worse - actually, it decreases quite a bit as time goes by. And (minor spoilers) I made a conscious decision never to let it, y'know, actually lead to anything. (I don't think the first-person narration has actually described or even mentioned a single piece of Areatha's body - for all that she's only had clothes on for one chapter out of seven!) So if you were worried it would get worse, then you should be okay. If what was already there bothered you... then you probably don't want to read it.
hS
I think it's because I've been working on this story for so long, but got so little done. Now it feels like I'm finally going to get that first draft out.
I know that feel.
Eh, what it has now is above my limits. Maybe I'll give it another go--I love the concept, and the alternate Earth--but I've got low tolerance for such things.
I have another addition for the map! The Democratic Republic of Yetis. This superstate's southern border stretches across the entirety of India and the Malay Peninsula. It borders the Persian Caliphate, Golden Mongolia, and the Chinese Folk Nation. Its northern border is the southern Mongolian border. This vast country began as tiny Nepal; however, due to an extremely beneficial alliance with the Tex-Mex Republic, it grew into what it is today.
(I chose Tex-Mex because apparently the Communist Party is very strong in Nepal, so I thought, hey, why not?)
-Alleb
Slotting into much the same space as your Yetis, we now have the Pure Land: a Buddhist nation behind the Saffron Curtain. In my mind, a disproportionately large chunk of the population have taken various vows of silence, making it a rather creepy place to visit. (That's probably the Saffron Curtain in question, actually.)
Hmm... so we've got three explicitly Christian nations in North America, an Islamic Caliphate, at least one Jewish state (possibly two, if Israel-Jordan counts), and now a Buddhist supernation. That's four of the Big Six*; I bet Hinduism and Sikhism feel left out.
*In Religious Education in Britain, we look into these six religions. I'm not sure what the selection criteria were - I doubt Judaism would qualify under 'biggest', but maybe it's in for historical reasons. Or maybe they just picked six that people would recognise the names of. Either way, it's been valuable knowledge, even if I can't quite remember all of the Sikh Ks.**
**There's the knife, the long hair, the underwear thing, the comb... look, it's been a long time since RE!***
***The fifth is a metal bracelet. Thanks, Wikipedia.
hS
That "Antemurale Christianitatis" refers to a medieval concept of a "bulwark of Christianity" against outside invaders, usually Muslims. It's been variously applied to Albania, Croatia, and the Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth; that some Americans have taken up the mantle is, er, let's go ahead and call it "presumptious". Or possibly "depressing". =]
It’s actually a fake, you know? The conspiracy, I mean, not the town. Or maybe pretending that Bielefeld doesn’t exist is the conspiracy.
I personally know somebody whose cousin’s fiancée knows somebody who’s born in Bielefeld.
HG
I've been to Bielefeld. I know it doesn't exist.
South Africa and the surrounding countries could always be put into some kind of 'New Zulu Empire'.
As for South America, You could have a nation consisting of Argentina, Chile, Uruguay, maybe some of the southern parts of Brazil and the Falkland Islands known as 'The Falklands Republic'. Their motto would be 'Bet you didn't see that coming, did you?'
Along with the Farmer's Market for Mattman.
I've also chucked in three Archaic Human Restoration Projects (in East Africa, Denisov, and Flores), and some more Mormons (feuding with the first lot, natch). But I've let Lesotho retain its independence, because I feel bad for it.
DCCCV, you can go ahead and assume that there's no such place as Bielefeld, and that there's a mountain in the heart of Berlin that no-one noticed until recently. But I don't think my giant polygon map can come with the scale, so.
hS
... forgot to revise the maps to reflect the conquests of xxx3.
hS
That the Midwestern United States be known as the "Farmer's Market"... Or perhaps the "Farmer's Union." Either or it should be a major military power with weaponry being based off of Farming equipment as a general rule.
I do like what I've written so far, though. There's the beginning of a short story about Jewish vampires, and a second thing started that combines two of my oldest original works into something new and fun. So at least there's that.
~DF
...am so far off schedule that I've written about 3k words total, have definitely not written every day, and actually almost half my word count comes from the two short essays I wrote yesterday for a midterm (I like them. I had fun writing them. They totally count.) In my defense, I've been sick and busy and mostly just exhausted from being sick. It's annoying.
I have no clue if I'm going to break even 10k words this time (not counting the essay I need to write for the end of the month), but I look forward to finding out. And I look forward even more to a, getting back to writing much at all, b, not being sick anymore, and c, actually getting caught up on my German homework. There's a lot of that.
Cheers, and good luck to whoever's writing,
~DF