Subject: Nitpicks
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Posted on: 2016-10-18 09:30:00 UTC

“You might want to grab you brace for this.”
Should be "your"?

Voldemort went on to claim that Harry was now the only remaining horcrux, because in order to use the Stone to regain a body, he needed to reabsorb the others, and that he regained his sanity in the process.
This confused me very much, until I realized that Voldemort regaining his sanity had happened off page already even before he had arrived at the Dursleys’ and thus should be "had needed" and "had regained" (past perfect).

I love the flashback, but I’m not quite sure about the logistics there. This is set in the outskirts of a village in the countryside (woods behind the house), so Mr Rosenberger has a legal reason to possess a rifle or shotgun (to protect his chickens or such), but would he carry it when he visits the neighbors to share brandy and stories? So he ran home to get his firearm, but then arrived at the same time as Ix’s father? Well, finding the man who was trying to find his daughter may have been easier than finding the girl.

HG

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