Re: interlude (spoilers) by
doctorlit
on 2018-01-21 03:08:00 UTC
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I really enjoyed the tone of this. Just calm and peaceful and simple, and really no PPC weirdness or supernatural whatever drawing focus from the characters. I also like the shift from the beginning, when Ix is unsure and Charlotte is supportive, and the reversal after Charlotte gets sunburned, where she becomes panicky and needs to rely on Ix's experience to stop the hurt. It's a creative way of getting to the proposal as well, without the usual set up for that kind of scene.
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Ix’s palms were slick with sweat by the time they got past the Security Dandelion guarding the exist, and when the heat of World One’s sun hit them, it only got worse.
Dandelions may guard the exist, but remember that tires don exits.
—doctorlit heavily recommends "kids" sunscreen for anyone spending time in strong sunlight. It's at least as effective as the adult stuff, but a bit less questionable-chemicals-y.
My cutest OTP is back! by
Matt Cipher
on 2018-01-17 23:50:00 UTC
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Seriously, if you hurt them even more, I swear I'll... ughh, I don't know what I'm gonna do... I'll be more upset! Ha!
Anywho, let's review:
“Why did I think a cat was a good idea?”
Because you're more of a dog person? ;>
The opening scene is solid. It's nice to see IxWolf wake up by something other than nightmares. Also, kinda cute to see her making coffee the Muggle way; but then still has that little kid side in her. 'Yep, I'm doing all the witchy stuff!'
Lottie getting sudden sunburn was absolutely hilarious :D
*does a happy dance* My fluffy ship is sailing mighty fine! As always, fantastic job!
Morning talk is also nice, like the Overwatch reference (crosses 'Overwatch' from a potential topic for my agents. Not gonna be a copycat). Also, did I miss anything? I must've missed something, but what was the meaning of 'fwai' once again?
I have a question, though. IxWolf conjures up a blanket. In New Cal. Is there some sort of field around the main base that stretches out and lets the otherworlders keep their otherworldliness? I understand inside the building, but far enough outside?
"We don’t have to worry about an unhappy ending dealt to us by a sadistic author."
You better not...