Subject: That was *fun*.
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Posted on: 2019-12-11 14:03:48 UTC

Also, a couple of French corrections:

N'est pas ("is not") should be "n'est-ce pas" ("is it not").

Either "the révolution" or "la révolution"--not "the la". La means the. I'd probably match what you choose for "ancien régime"--or even just put the whole sentence into French, especially if you go with "la" and "l'ancien" ans thus have all of one English word in between them? "La révolution contre l'ancien régime", I believe.

Also, I want to write something in this verse more and more (especially after reading this), but I'm still figuring out if I can pull it off! I don't have a ton of experience with the genre.

On the other hand, I can always combine an attempt with a little research, and correct anything that sounds off after posting...hmm.

~Z

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