Subject: Re: mission
Posted on: 2020-01-12 23:54:56 UTC

I don't know the canon well, but I think I got a good sense of what was going on, and you've got interesting characters. Looking forward to seeing more of them.

Minor notes:

Did you want the Vulpix "arcing" or "arching" its back? The former feels like a typo, but I'm not sure.

"couldn’t much care." feels like it should be "couldn't care much."

"poor SPaG-less and name fixed" seems wrong

“Put this in the RC, and get Maryanne to held carry things" should have "help"

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