Subject: Ōtsu no Uminari sounds entertaining.
Posted on: 2021-11-17 11:31:21 UTC
I don't think I have the cultural competence to adopt him but I would be curious about his interactions with, say, a Chinese cultivator. (ETA because I meant to say this earlier and utterly forgot to: his inadvertent equating HQ with hell is hilarious
and very true.)
That being said, interesting mission. Nella sounds like a pain with her horrid pranks. You do a nice job of sparing us most of the gory details, but I think I'd like to see a bit more Kaguya and Momoka interacting with each other rather than just complaining at the fic. It might help set the scene for bigger character arcs and trajectories throughout these missions, if that's something you're interested in doing. Based off of the ending scene in Medical, you've got an arc going for Momoka's worries about being helpless on a mission, so I look forward to seeing how she handles it and whether or not that does eventually equate to a change in her current dynamic with Kaguya.
(Another ETA I keep meaning to ask: since your characters are Japanese, what are their opinions regarding the Inconvenience Store? :'D)