Subject: It's got a promising beginning.
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Posted on: 2022-05-17 03:37:56 UTC

The comments Rebecca and Deirdre are making are pretty amusing, especially paired with them trying to move punctuation into the places where they ought to be! I think you can ease up on quoting the badfic so much -- focus on the very egregious and/or funny parts, and give us more of Rebecca and Deirdre interacting with each other in addition to snarking at the fic. That way you can give us more of their personalities outside of Standard Snarky PPC Agent. For example, Rebecca could talk more about Metallica, and Deirdre... you said she was from a sci-fi world you're working on? Why not have her talk about where she comes from, or run comparisons between her world and World One? Is there an equivalent of Metallica back where she comes from?

All in all, an entertaining start. Looking forward to the continuation!

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