Maaaaan. What did I just read. I feel bad that Jiwon and Charlie had to sit through all this, although Charlie’s deadpan delivery and aloofness reduce the grossness, as always. I am a little confused as to why Jiwon took anti-lustin, since he seems grossed out by the situation? Certainly not in danger of wanting to join in, or whatever.

I will give the fic one point, though: NOS-4-A2 turning into a Crobat was unexpected and funny. I also loved how understated the assassination of the Lucario was. I thought for sure a fight scene was about to ensue, and that only natural/flowing water could destroy a vampire, but nope! A bit of bottled Nestlé extortion is all that’s required! Love it. Funny that vampires would have water as weakness in a setting where a majority of the wild monsters can shoot water out of their mouths in some manner . . . (At least, it was a majority back in my day, not going to look up if it’s still true.) Lastly, I see the fic was published in 2011, and the author on a gothic, Medieval castle in the Pokémon world’s version of England . . . and then, years later, Sword and Shield come out with a huge focus on sports stadiums!

—doctorlit is amused to learn that the “NOS4A2” joke has been made by both a Disney cartoon and a horror novelist

• That was a pretty neat interlude, and I like the concept!
• Ouch on Charlie's spell getting ruined by the [BEEEEP].
• Charlie, you're being way too enthusiastic about this mission
• ... The "British" bit is funny
• Heh on the very long monologue charge
• I can see why Jiwon is concerned about the Lucario. The premise definitely doesn't have healthy relationship vibes.
• ... It got worse
• Poor Jiwon, having to put up with loud noises
• Doing all the skipped-over smut in a coffin does sound rough
• Using the fic's wording to pull of the water kill was a neat setup

Overall, nice stuff that I enjoyed reading.

- Tomash

Heh! I love how excited Charlie got over finding old equipment like that, but then, they're willing to blow it up to avoid hurting Jiwon's feelings. Hope they didn't trade anything too valuable/useful for the box! I guess that was a bard spell of some sort they used to destroy the box? That's cool; I didn't realize they could do things like that with their mandola!

Yeah, those old litmus tests were more focused on physical traits than on character interactions, which encouraged less creativity in character design, rather than encouraging greater creativity in dialogue and action. I suspect quite few a PPC agents—and canon characters, for that matter—would fail them.

—doctorlit will read the mission when the time becomes available

especially the idea of a triangle-headed human 🤣 and the moaning 🤣🤣🤣. However, I don't see the charges being read out prior to execution; is that okay?

P S: I'm considering starting a spin-off page for your writing, are you alright with that?