Subject: Argh.
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Posted on: 2013-05-28 16:44:00 UTC

I may do something with the second one; I can't make it through more than a few chapters of the first one, but the second...come on, you don't put angels in M-e. The closest thing to angels there are Maiar, who most certainly do not have 'angel wings', and what the-- 'i got to go i am about to be ambushed by Orcs'? The heck? That's just sloppy. I mean, if she knows she's about to be ambushed, why's she writing about her backstory instead of preparing? And if she just plain has to go, she shouldn't know about the ambush--oh, I give up. Also, you have no idea how much I want a Supernatural-verse angel agent to send on this mission...especially as the whole 'angel-wings tattoo' is practically a trope in SPN fanfic, and it can be done really well.

This whole angel thing really bothers me, can you tell?

...I can't tell if she's calling Elrond 'father' in Hebrew, or thinks that he's the band ABBA. Either way, it's wrong, especially as she then calls him 'Ada' in the next sentence.

ARGH, SCRIPTFIC!

And what's up with this whole 'prayed to the gods and to our ancestors' and 'thank Gandolf and our ancestors'? I know several World One cultures (and several other continua, too) that use the ancestors thing, but Middle-earth Elves don't use it and never would. They have the Valar...who I don't think they actually spend much time praying to. In fact, I'm not sure there even *is* a prayer system in M-e. This Sue is so off it's...actually, it is kind of funny.

I think I'll take it.

~DF

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