Subject: This one bugs me
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Posted on: 2013-05-22 04:43:00 UTC

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8335211/1/Death-Note-Time-Gone-By
This fan-fiction will continue Death Note's story line, with N acting as the new great detective, and Ryuk as the main shinigami, again.
However, this time, a different character picks up the notebook, whose intentions shy away from Light's own ideas.
She won't use it for her own deeds, so what will be the drive to use the ominous notebook this time? Please read & review...

To be honest, after reading it a few times, it doesn't seem that bad (maybe I'm desensitized), but it just bugs me.
There's irritating narration, stupid names, contrivances, implausibility, MC singing 'Rolling in the Deep' to allude to her trajeck past, and just general stupidity.

An example of the last thing on the list is a man using the name Niseno Namae (fake name in Japanese) as an alias... and he was using it while he was in Japan. There wasn't any comment about the alias itself, so I'm guessing the stupidity of it was unintentional. (BTW, his real name is Chimei Sutoka, which translates to either Well-known Stalker or Fatal Stalker.)

And there's also the things that have been done with the Death Note that made it seem like the author either ignored how the rules worked or misunderstand them.

Thoughts?

I apologize if this isn't the correct thread to post this.

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