Subject: If Pinkie can bake the fourth wall, surely you can brak it
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Posted on: 2013-05-20 16:01:00 UTC
(Google Pinkie's Brew if you are confused.)
Yeah, this is a really bad fic, and I am going to step back and let the others rip it apart.
http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-22459-13/joshlamont+Obliviate+Is+Never+Enough.htm
Name: Obliviate is Never Enough
Category: BtVSxHP
Thoughts: It's very fast paced, so be prepared to have to read some areas over a couple of times in order to get it.
However.....
I think I died laughing.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8335211/1/Death-Note-Time-Gone-By
This fan-fiction will continue Death Note's story line, with N acting as the new great detective, and Ryuk as the main shinigami, again.
However, this time, a different character picks up the notebook, whose intentions shy away from Light's own ideas.
She won't use it for her own deeds, so what will be the drive to use the ominous notebook this time? Please read & review...
To be honest, after reading it a few times, it doesn't seem that bad (maybe I'm desensitized), but it just bugs me.
There's irritating narration, stupid names, contrivances, implausibility, MC singing 'Rolling in the Deep' to allude to her trajeck past, and just general stupidity.
An example of the last thing on the list is a man using the name Niseno Namae (fake name in Japanese) as an alias... and he was using it while he was in Japan. There wasn't any comment about the alias itself, so I'm guessing the stupidity of it was unintentional. (BTW, his real name is Chimei Sutoka, which translates to either Well-known Stalker or Fatal Stalker.)
And there's also the things that have been done with the Death Note that made it seem like the author either ignored how the rules worked or misunderstand them.
Thoughts?
I apologize if this isn't the correct thread to post this.
...I shouldn't have described the past as trajeck.
Pharaoh Love, by PiecesBurnUp. So far, seems T but might contain lemon. It's a Yu-Gi-Oh! badfic written by someone who seems to be rather... smitten with Yami Yugi.
Where to begin...
1) This fic apparently gives Tea Gardener cancer and kills her off offscreen so the Sue will be able to pair with the Pharaoh.
2) The fic's SPaG is consistently bad and has tense shifts.
3) The Sue cries a Single Tear.
4) The Sue has an uncanon Millennium Item called, I kid you not, 'millennium belt', which is also a capitalisation-created Mini.
5) The Sue is a five-time duelling champion while still being in school. (Remember: this is a continuum where duelling is as important as the economy and politics. It's like have a highschooler for president multiple times.)
6) The Sue invents a card, gives it a cat-on-keyboard name, makes it Forbidden (which means it's probably OP) and her Spirit Partner for no reason whatsoever.
7) Said Spirit is also quite a jerk, his response to people saying that she can't beat Yugi being calling them idiots.
8) The Sue fails forever at being a Tsundere toward Yami Yugi.
9) The fic contains dumb metaphors and purple writing in general.
10) The fic has a confusing, non-linear episode order.
11) The fic separates Yami Yugi from Yugi's body for no reason.
12) There's also a possible second Sue.
And all of that? From the first three chapters. This needs to die in a fire. Badly.
You can add charges for not knowing the stats of the cards she is using, not remembering that her monster is in defense mode, and generally failing at math. All this is according to chapter 4.
I've actually been looking for a fic exactly like this. I have plans, you see, and this looks like it will work wonderfully.
Do you mind if I claim this?
-Phobos
I have my own, slightly less bad Yu-Gi-Oh! fanfic that I am missioning right now. Though I'd be very happy if agent!Des, Anebrin, or both will cameo in that mission. I think it will help their character development.
It all depends on when and how I decide to do the mission. I'll keep you in mind.
-Phobos
Could you please translate your comment for that last fanfic?
"Ridi, Pagliaccio/Sul tuo amore infranto" is from Canio's lament at the end of act one and means "Laugh, Clown, at thy fractured love".
This...story...hurts...
Noooo... make it go away. This hurts....
Vampires and shampoo and OOC characters... actually, Petunia acting like that might be a complete Character Replacement.
For those who made it to the 2nd chapter: Braking the fourth wall?
(Google Pinkie's Brew if you are confused.)
Yeah, this is a really bad fic, and I am going to step back and let the others rip it apart.
Oh glods, when mini-Aragogs appear in the summary you know you're in for something awful.
Also, to save space on the Board could you just hijack the previous badfic reporting thread next time? It'd keep all the badfics in one place. :'D
They had me foaming at the mouth, that is. Use your freaking eyes and read your own work before posting!
Right, this has made my brain hurt so much that I decided to actually study for my finals. Thanks, Pauline.
I've only read the first chapter, and I already want to puke.
Just no. No. IT NEEDS TO DIE!
-Aila