Seems it's been taken down. Not a huge surprise, but a bit of a shame, really.

This could be our best chance to discover the embryological and fetal development of the Mary-Sue and the early effects of the Plotbunny!

Naruto is practically infamous for having overpowered characters with over-the-top angsty pasts--I think I described it once as being something like a picture of a rape-murder scene painted in bright blocks of primary colors--but canon sues are rare (ymmv, of course) due to the time that is given to develop each character and make them sympathetic.

That said, Ayame is waaaaay past what would be appropriate, even for Naruto canon. And, as Neshomeh said, deities aren't a big part of Naruto canon anyway; having a character who is one (or is related to one) would be out of place.

If a story gets written and somebody wants to PPC it, I'd be glad to act as canon-consultant for the Naruto universe. ^^

This fic is wirtten by a Lebanese guy/girl. Would it be write to spork fics from people who don't speak English as first language? (I don't mean it's not a Sue, but, for example, would grammar and spelling mistakes be major charges if we take this fact into account?)

You were not kidding. This is going to be one messed-up fic, isn't it. Generally, any fic with a first chapter that does nothing but painstakingly detail the original character the author is introducing screams 'SUE', but this one...Ugh. Allow me to highlight the most erroneous tip-offs;

1. Eyes: as storm shadow's eyes but a feminization style and larger.

2. Height: 1 m and 55 cm

3. Mass: 45 kg

(Note: According to the Heart, Lung, and Blood Association, that's a body mass index of 18, or 'dangerously underweight'. This say anything to you?)

4. her real element is ice but she controls all the elements cause she is the goddess of elemental powers.

5. Ayame is sixteen years old. She has a bloody and sad past. She has a super natural power, and had a ying seal on her right arm, she had it since she was born or u can say since her mother was pregnant of her and her twin brothers and sister.

It isn't finished, and I haven't gotten Permission yet, but can I volunteer to take this? I don't know much about GI Joe or Naruto, but I do know a thing or two about good writing, and this is not it...

It goes without saying that this is too early to call - you can't spork an entry with no narrative - but like most of us, I'm quite wary of that bio.

I'll be watching quietly; there's no point that I can make via review that Neshomeh hasn't already brought up in a more concise fashion. Here's hoping this author is willing to pay attention to the proffered words of advice...

before I kill someone… please stop me x((

This character screams Sue as much as a girl in the water would scream shark when she saw one.

“Eyes: as storm shadow's eyes but a feminization style and larger. It's color as her hair's color but reddish and darker.”
I have yet to meet or see a woman, who have dark chestnut brown eyes, with a bit of red in them.

“She has a bloody and sad past.”
Well that sounds typical sueisshh (almost breaks neck trying to say the word)

There might as well be put some agents on this story, before it even begins.

Like the others, I would agree to at least watch this one. Although the way the words are in this fic sorta makes me cringe, however...

"Element: her real element is ice but she controls all the elements cause she is the goddess of elemental powers."

Sue. Sue. Sue.

And I want to know how twins can be elder or younger. I mean, there is a delay of only seconds. Not enough to say "s/he's older than the other one(s)".

I saw also SMS-like abbreviations and wrong grammar. This one is probably going to become the first fic recognized as badfic before even being written.

I've left a review with pointers, giving them the benefit of the doubt, but that profile just screams Sue. And it should definitely be in Crossovers, since half the names seem to be borrowed from Naruto.

~Neshomeh