Subject: Re: For starters...
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Posted on: 2009-12-21 04:47:00 UTC
Um... Didn't Ollivander faint because of the fact that the wand was silver. I don't think it was because of Luna.
Subject: Re: For starters...
Author:
Posted on: 2009-12-21 04:47:00 UTC
Um... Didn't Ollivander faint because of the fact that the wand was silver. I don't think it was because of Luna.
I liked the Silvermoon one. What's wrong with it?
Um... Didn't Ollivander faint because of the fact that the wand was silver. I don't think it was because of Luna.
It's still not likely that someone like Ollivander, who's seen more strange things than most, would actually faint over something like that. Therefore, it's the author's/self-insert's/Sue's doing. Anyway, that's just one quibble in a list of the fic's errors.
... You're new around here, aren't you? What brings you to the Board?
~Neshomeh
Wee, isn't that what fanfiction is for? I don't believe there are any good or bad fanfics. It's just the author's imagination on what they think how something should have gone. Or just mindless drabbles on daydreams they had on the certain topic.
Also,I came here because I was interested.
Exactly as you say it, that is the way YOU think. We might be able to cintinue later, but not now.
Good night!
Sorry, typo. I meant Well. Mindless error.
It's just that, aside from being amateurish, I don't think there's much wrong with it. Yes, all the Weyrs are made up; yes, he's a HAD; yes, there are some little things off... but I don't think Stanor is a 'Stu, at least not yet. The spirit of Pern seems to be there, as far as I can tell.
I'm gonna leave him some concrit. Hopefully it will help.
~Neshomeh
But the complete lack of commas is somewhat horrifying. If you think it's not bad enough to kill, I can find something else, though.
If he becomes more Stuish later on, by all means, kill it. But for the moment, though, he only really has about one chapter's worth of material and not much to go on, IMO.
~Neshomeh