Subject: Permission
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Posted on: 2009-07-29 02:02:00 UTC

It is granted. {= )

To add to Pads' advice about punctuation, I advise you to choose your adjectives a little more carefully. Take the following:

1) a veritable mass of brown curls

2) a massive cat lover

"Veritable" is one of those words, like "literally," that have been wrongly co-opted as expressions of emphasis. If you want to say that Meip has big hair, "mass" by itself serves the purpose. If you need to emphasize the mass, choose a word that truly describes it, like "springy" or something.

As for the second phrase, the word "massive" there makes it sound either like Meip is very overweight or like she loves massive cats. (Clearing up that ambiguity is how a hyphen would come in handy.) I suspect you're embellishing on the cliche "big cat-lover." The trouble is that that phrase, though in common usage, isn't correct. The cliche slides under the radar because it is everywhere. When you change it, though, you draw attention to it and the incorrectness of the phrase jumps out. You could say that Meip is a devout cat-lover, an obsessive cat-lover, an unrepentant cat-lover.... There are many possibilities in which the description is correct.

I hope that all makes sense. Let me know if I can clarify anything for you. Meanwhile, welcome to the PPC. {= )

~Neshomeh

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