Subject: Wow
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Posted on: 2014-05-01 15:50:00 UTC

I believe that is a first. I don't think I've ever gotten such an official, academic review before.

And to top it off, it is enjoyable to read. Well done.

I like some of the substitutions that are suggested in the "other versions" of the poem, and I will likely rework it over the next couple of days to incorporate some of them. To be honest, the two days that I spent working on this were almost entirely comprised of trying to fill in three and a half stanzas without repeating ending rhymes (which I succeeded on with the exception of 'night'), and not much on editing.

-Phobos

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