Subject: Nice, and some typo spotting.
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Posted on: 2015-08-15 11:15:00 UTC
Laughed a lot when Rina discovered she could punch walls without getting hurt and gleefully continued punching.
"“What’s the matter with me? What’s the matter with you?” RIna demanded"
A mini-Agent! *catches RIna*
Four agents don mutant disguise for a Twilight x X-Men mission that will break their brains--and call on their acting skills.
Yes, I know best pony has nothing to do with the X-Men or sparklepires. No, I don't care.
Great work, y'all! The parts with them getting used to their new powers were the best. And the part where Rina goes improvised-flamethrower-crazy but in a good way. (Also, I can't be the only person who read "...wings suddenly snapping open again when she got a look at what the Reader was wearing." and instantly thought "Wingboner". Well done, you two.)
LOL @ the "In Pinchy We Trust" coin. Either of you ever consider doing a pony mission in the future?
What's a "wated"? Is that some new variety of mini-Tribble?
Late-ish response, but still.
I've thought of doing a ponies mission, although it'd have to be either a cowrite or done with a consultant--I've seen all of, oh, one episode ever. I do, however, want to see Kozar as a pony--or Dawn, or both, aaah--and watching agents flail around in a continuum they don't know (crossed with one they do know, if they're DIC) sounds like a lot of fun. I don't currently have a candidate, though.
As for the wated, to add to what Scape said: it seems to act rather a lot like a tribble in that it shrieks at Klingons. As it looks like a (black, I think?) tribble with fangs...Klingons react to it in much the same way as they do to tribbles, at least going by Kozar.
Er... pass.
Rina and Zeb adopted the wated from their Rose Potter mission (part 5, if memory serves); beyond it being a small furry thing that likes to eat paper, we know very little about this strangely adorable spelling error. =]
Should I play Taps?
Why? Not that I object to bugle music or anything, but I can't figure out why the military 'extinguish lights' call--also played at *funerals*--would fit here.
(And yes, the fact that I looked that up is what's keeping this post from simply reading, 'huh? Explain, please?' Although, to be fair, all over done is find out more detail to go 'huh?' about.)
On another note, if you actually know how to play a bugle IRL, that's really cool.
~DF
Because this missions sounds deadly. A TwilightxX-Men crossover? Brrr...
Taking part in the community means more than just making random posts that don't really mean anything. It comes off as being a little attention-seeking.
And I'll help out at the Wiki.
...being a member of the community. Hang out, chat, get to know people. Show genuine interest rather than posting random things.
Sorry, I'm still no good at socialization. I'll read it right now.
It's not a question of socialization. If you're not reading the missions you're commenting on, why are you commenting on them? I'm not having a go at you, I'm just genuinely confused.
It's just that I'm not used to socializing so I don't know what's appropriate or not.
...before they've read the missions or before they've read much of them, and then comment again once they've finished reading. But yeah, no, generally it is considered logical and polite to at least have the intention of reading the mission (unless you're joining a side discussion that's sprung up in the same thread, that happens here and there). I hadn't realized you (N. Harmonik) hadn't read it, which was why I was confused--this was an earlier mission. It actually takes place some weeks or a month after Cale Seche. If anything, I would have expected a comment about playing Taps on the LMM/Picking Up the Pieces combo, considering what happens there, and it's so exciting to be able to say that now, because it's no longer spoilers :D
~DF
I was able to follow everything (though the first mention of "Wardo" did throw me off for a while before I made the connection), and there were not very many errors. But errors there were:
1) This is not the animated series, she doesn’t permanently absorb powers in the movies!
That comma should be a semicolon.
2) Before Kozar could reply the narrative continued from Edward’s point of view, giving the agents a description of the Sue
A comma is needed after "Before Kozar could reply".
3) She made for the door, a quiet figure in dark pants and a green t-shirt which were none the worse for wear after their adventure as a leather catsuit.
Misplaced modifier: as written, the door is what is clothed.
Also, two questions
a) What exactly did Rina say to piss Kozar off so badly?
b) Are you suggesting that the Reader has the hots for Rina? If so, that seems quite quick, especially since all the Reader did was try to maintain her balance by grabbing onto the nearest possible handhold, which happened to be mutant!Rina's wings.
a) It's a Klingon insult that doesn't have a translation, but it's implied to be extremely vulgar and insulting. So... an F-you on linguistic steroids? The fact that she muttered it makes it even more insulting (at least in Klingon culture).
b) ...that's actually the other way around. Rina had more of an "Oh my god she's hot" moment than anything, and the Reader had to pretty quickly dissuade her. Is... that not clear?
Reading it again, I see that what you said was clear. Apparently Rina's mutant disguise does have something in common with MLP pegasi, if fanon is to be believed...
I'm starting to get confused about the povs. I originally thought that they were sorta related to the bads, in that they're creatures spawned from misspellings. But why did "Rogue's POV" create a pov in this mission?
IIRC, originally povs were created because the badfic writer wrote "pov", all lowercase. And I understand how, in a previous mission (I believe it was a SkarmorySilver cowrite), a pov was created when the writer wrote "[name] POV", no possessive.But what's the deal here?
And on a broader note, how should one mark a change in point of view?
Of course there should be some scene divider, or a new chapter, but point-of-view tags are offending.
Supposed I showed the readers Mafalda Hopkirk sitting in the Trace room, watching the Trace report of the Battle of the DOM and organizing counter measures. Then, after a scene divider, I show the readers Constable Bulstrode taking the elevators down to the Atrium and walking to the watchwizards security desk. Why on earth should I tell the readers that the first scene is "Hopkirk’s POV" and the second scene is "Bulstrode’s POV"?
It’s a bit trickier with First Person. For one, the tone of the narration should change, showing that another person is narrating now. Then, the readers should get clues from the narration. They hopefully still remember whom Hopkirk sent down to the Atrium in the last scene (but I may pull off a surprise by having another narrator also going down their).
So, I would put up point-of-view tags because I don’t trust my reader’s ability to understand what’s going on there in plain sight? Or because I don’t trust my ability to show what’s going on in the narrative (in which case I should continue writing to improve my skills, but I probably shouldn’t go public yet)? Or because I’m too lazy to even try? Can there be any other reason?
HG
I haven't read the ASoIaF books, but IIRC, each chapter is marked with the name of the POV character. And in the Animorphs: The Hork-Bajir Chronicles books, I believe that each chapter is also marked by the name of the POV character.
I don’t know about Animorphs.
George R. R. Martin certainly isn’t lazy, and having read some of his early SF, I trust him and his editors. So I’m wondering now whether it may be possible to experience ASoIaF in different ways, like following one characters story reading only their chapters and then going back to follow another character, versus reading everything chapter by chapter.
The answer to your question "how should one mark a change in point of view?" may be: do it like Martin, but don’t if he wouldn’t.
HG
But finding a giant "X POV" in the middle of a paragraph is extremely jarring, not to mention obnoxious.
I'm not even a little bit sorry. =]
They're there because it's funny. Povs are little skittery scuttly fluffy things that hide on top of a canon's head. They go snrf. Big POVs are similar; however, they just hide behind the canon in question. Or rather, since they're about the size of a steroidal wildebeest (though most of it is floof, like a giant angora rabbit), they TRY to hide behind them. I find this funny. YMMV. =]
Laughed a lot when Rina discovered she could punch walls without getting hurt and gleefully continued punching.
"“What’s the matter with me? What’s the matter with you?” RIna demanded"
A mini-Agent! *catches RIna*
Nice catch. :D
And no I totally wouldn't go around punching walls for the heck of it just because I could, why are you looking at me like that.
... That Rose Potter is somewhere in Rina, and is slowly assimilating herself.