Subject: Interesting, very interesting.
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Posted on: 2015-05-11 13:59:00 UTC

(Btw, it would help with reading your posts if you double-space your paragraphs. Ta.)

Westron... um... well, the grammar might be the same as English, I guess. But the vocab is wildly different - it bears literally no resemblance to English. So I'm not sure that'd help!

Inzil is, I hope I made clear, an Adunaic name - it would be a very old name in the Third Age. Sort of like calling your kid... um... okay, 'any name out of the Bible', I suppose. ^^ We know that Westron retains the 'z' sound, so it's probably a valid word in Westron. (Nicknaming her Kali - well, why not? Will probably cause confusion when she meets Kalimac the Hobbit.)

I would definitely use 'actual' names if you possibly can - we've got more of them than you might think! The only lands you're spending time in that don't use an elvish language are Bree and Rohan (if you go there). Bree itself might be tricky to name (or just call it 'the village'), or she could simply use the English name in narrative out of habit. The Pony is an actual translation, so it's okay to re-translate to English. And Rohan - well, we actually have Theoden's real name, Tûrac!

(You know, many years ago, I'm pretty sure I thought Merry was a girl. You can imagine my surprise when Bombadil told them all to strip! Not sure where I caught on, actually...)

I think wiping Amy's memory is... mm, dubious. For one, surely Sauron would want her to keep it? For two, knowing the future changes it - so the 'future' Amy knows isn't the one she'll encounter. For three... it removes any justification I can come up with for Elrond to send her along. Every one of the Nine Walkers has a good reason to be there - Amy wouldn't.

I've speculated here about how a girl who knows (partly!) the book could interact with Middle-earth. Feel free to crib anything you like from it. ^
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Mute is an... interesting character trait. Certainly gets round the pronunciation problem! I'm not sure why you'd think it's particularly Suish, though - yes, it's unusual, but unusual doesn't have to be bad. Just make sure you give her both the positives and the negatives, and she'll be fine.

Well, 'fine', at least. Tengwar are, again, moderately obsolete - Frodo recognises them as letters on the Ring, but doesn't even try to translate them even phonetically. Most people (including Gandalf) use the runes of Daeron - and no-one bothers to learn them at this end of time, because they're boring. ;) But sign language... I understand the 'words' are ideagraphic, rather than phonetic in any sense. So yes, Inzil/Kali could probably understand a sign for chicken just as well (or badly) as an English speaker. Um... might make things difficult when she's with the Fellowship, though.

The thing about Quenya and Sindarin is that, um, Tolkien preferred Quenya. He wrote poems in it; he didn't do that much in Sindarin. So we have a lot more Quenya to hand, though I think (may be wrong) the longest single passage is the Sindarin King's Letter. The one people learn is usually Quenya, though that said, there's a few books about Sindarin; maybe she had a copy of David Salo's A Gateway to Sindarin!

Ultimately, the plot is up to you (obviously!). My main piece of advice is to consider the consequences of what you're doing! If Amy breaks her leg in Moria, the Fellowship is slowed down, don't get to Balin's Tomb before the orcs catch them, and have to fight in the open - even when the balrog arrives. If Amy urges them to bypass Lorien, the whole story takes place a month sooner - so they probably don't get ambushed at Rauros. Heck, if Amy's chatting with Boromir while Frodo's off thinking, Boromir wouldn't go after him, and Frodo would come to a decision of his own. You could even start the story right there, with no earlier changes, and fill in her backstory along the way!

(And what would Frodo decide? Very difficult to say. He's avoided making decisions at all previous points, though he has shown a tendency towards self-sacrifice. He might well slip off by himself while the others wait - but with eight members of the Fellowship still behind, and the fact that Frodo wasn't the one who thought of breaking the boats, at least some of them could go after him. Call the chapter 'The Parting of the Fellowship' and send Boromir and Amy off to Minas Tirith - see where that gets you.)

I have no problems with a well-done Boromance (though Acacia probably would have!). Remember that a deadly hike probably isn't the best place for it to get serious, though! Letting the Quest portion be her slow (sloooow) growth in admiration for him, and its development into something more - and working out a reason for him to like her - is probably the best way to go, yes.

I think this version was less than three pages? Noooot sure...

hS

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