You seem to copy-pasted from the first post of Matt's reactions, which is okay, but I left off a couple of exclaimation marks the first time 'round:
Matt, hugging her back: Yeah! I won should be Matt, hugging her back: Yeah! I won! and David Null: Great job, Matthew should be David Null: Great job, Matthew!
But, besides that, it looks okay to me!
-kA
(Edit: Id'd wrong type of mark.)
(Edit 2: Under the copyright, you noted that I own Matthew, David, O’Ryan, and Paye, but you forgot to list Kittyauthor (which is obvious, but I would still like her listed) and Crow (they're the trainee under Kittyauthor and O'Ryan, first mentioned in "Landing Pad"), and I would like David's full name listed (but that's more of a nitpick than anything). Those are the only other things I found.)