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This fic would be worth a look:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6061292/1/CodeGeassDanceinthe_Dark

Summary: Amelia was normal girl, then her life change 4ever. She get Geass and face off against powerful rival and evil guy. And she also find love at same time. My first story ever, lol. Enjoy. R&R. Thank u! XD. Lelouch/OC, Schnozel/OC and other pars.

Warning: Has Lady Gaga in it. And she's the Emperor's daughter, with a Geass that allows her to open portals throughout space and time.

I cannot help but marvel at the entire crew's total immunity to Suefluence.

We may be on to something big. If we can figure out the secret of their resistance, it could perhaps be incorporated in the PPC training program.

What do you guys think?

I'm not so familiar with Star Trek, but that was just funny.

Yeah, something like that happened to me just two days ago. I was looking for a specific badfic (also not bad per se, but horrifically messed up), namely 'Once Bitten, Twice Shy', where the standard personality and behavior of members of the xenomorph race was so badly twisted it would have been hilarious, if didn't like xenos so much.

I mean, seriously, can you imagine a runner xenomorph (admittedly of below-average intelligence) chasing its tail like a kyoot lickle puppy, while making funny noises? That's not only stupid, but also totally unnecessary, given the length of said tail. And it just gets better and better.

Anyway, the point is, I was going to put this fic up on Unclaimed Badfic, but, just like yours, it's gone. Can't find it anywhere on the web.

If anyone does know where to find, post me, would ya? Thanks.

I found a badfic (well, not exactly bad, but so messed up that would be still a nice mission) in which the NCIS team run a summer camp for anime characters... but it disappeared before I could even finish to read it. Quite disappointed, it would have been a good way for Agent Sergio Turbo to get a photo with Jethro Gibbs, Sakura Kinomoto and Nanoha Takamachi simultaneously.

Not that I am out of work. After fixing the typos in "Don't Forget The Canon" I'm going to kill an orrible one in which Shaoran first get killed, then when Sakura revives him he gets Author-Wraith infected and rapes her. And all canonical couples involving characters that appear in this badfic get destroyed. Better buy some Bleepka before entering it.

Why, yes it could! At long last, I finally buckled down and finished this mission.

http://rc6664.webs.com/mission5.htm

While Adder recuperates from the last mission, Deuce teams up with Kestrel and Mordecai against the horror of the Dark Lady Jane, formerly known as... Hermione Granger?

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/posts.php?discussion=nrtkytupv5e3vl54mj67lsev&page=1

Do you want to see what happens when people try to recreate the "Funny Badness" of works like My Immortal (outside of the Fanfic Land Event)? Well, here it is. If you have a yearning to release your inner fanbrat but missed the chance to do so, you can do it here. C'mon. it's fun!

Or Generic Meat.

I'm sorry, but there are several issues, mostly with your writing sample, that are too glaring to be overlooked or let by with warnings for you to keep in mind while writing.

Most overtly, your grammar needs work. The only spelling error I found was "she dies her hair bright red", but both your biographies and writing sample (and some posts here on the Board, actually) are missing capitals, use numerals where they shouldn't, and there are a lot of commas missing, as well as some other punctuation marks. Some examples:

* 24 years old
- In prose, numbers this low should be written out: "twenty-four years old".

The following are all missing commas, which I have inserted to illustrate:
* Department: All-purpose Department, Star Trek Division
* to have to share his RC with a woman, mostly because
* Being from the north of England, he speaks with

* Shrugging decided to make a new message to kill some time.
- This should be: "Shrugging, he decided".

* from acting Captain of Engineering Joel of a nameless Federation star ship
- I've watched practically every filmed minute of Star Trek, and I've never heard of a "Captain of Engineering"; it's always been "chief engineer". I believe "Acting Captain" is a title that therefore requires both words to be capitalised, though that can be argued. Within the Star Trek world, "starship" is always one word, and I highly doubt it is nameless; all ships (save for Borg ones, I guess) have names (and Borg ships have designations). If he simply doesn't remember the name due to this amnesia, it should be very easy to look up, given that even if the computer were inactive and unable to supply the data, all Federation ships have name plaques on their Bridge. I realise this is supposed to be from an incomplete fanfic, but why couldn't you pick a name anyway?

* An event seems to have occurred where I do not remember the crew
- At the very least, "where" should be "which", but this sentence really needs to be rephrased to something like, "which has left me with no memory of the crew", or "that has caused me to lose all memory of..." Also, this seems like a very foolish thing for someone to announce on an open channel, given he doesn't know where he is and that there are pleanty of people even within Federation territory who would be quick to capture a lone starship with all its advanced and expensive technology.

* hadn’t used the words lonely or bored at all very professional.
- This really should be: "hadn't used the words "lonely" or "bored" at all - very professional." (though the dash, of course, can be replaced with a comma or even a semi-colon at will).

* (A few minutes before)
- Nothing technically wrong, but there is really no need for this, given how easy it would be for Sarah's diary entry to appear in italicised prose in the middle of the scene rather than before it. That is, of course, a matter of style, but if you insist on using this, I would strongly suggest having it italicised rather than in brackets, and that you use the word "earlier" rather than "before", following convention.

* “Excuse me can you tell me how to get to...”
There needs to be a comma after "me" and a question mark after the elipsis. However, since she is being interrupted, the elipsis should be a dash or a hyphen, like so: "Excuse me, can you tell me how to get to-?"

"Starfleet" is one word, with a captial "S" - it is neither "star Fleet" or "Star Fleet". "Star Trek" (referring to the fandom) should always be capitalised and (preferably) italicised. "World One" is a name and so both words need to be capitalised. There are a few other instances of missing capitals. You also have a habit of using the word "fairly" at every opportunity, sometimes in very close succession.

A good beta would solve most of these problems. However, I find it hard to believe that you could have missed the inconsistancies, if nothing else, which gives me the impression that you didn't spend a great deal of time on this, or even re-read what you'd written before submitting it. That is not exactly a point in your favour.

In terms of the content, I have no significant issues with your agents. They are somewhat bland, but have room to grow and a decent amount of contrast that could make for some good comedy. I'm more concerned by the blandness of the writing itself; simply put, there is nothing about your writing sample that is different from all the other partner-meets-partner stories around, and subjective though it is, you didn't make me laugh. To be fair, because we ask everyone to follow the same broad outlines there will always be similarities, but there was not one thing in your character interactions that will stick in my mind. This itself isn't grounds for denying Permission, but I want to mention it anyway.

A more minor point, but your bio says that Joel was from a fic that "was dropped before anything more than a character sheet was created." Offhand, I don't believe that a mere character sheet can create a character; I think it's the posting of a fanfic that enables it to affect the canon and enlivens it to the point that characters can be recruited.

Finally, you haven't exactly been the most active member of our community. Since your own introductary post, you've mostly just greeted other newbies. The other posts that you have made or replied to tend to be very short, contributing little to the conversation. When I came and saw your Permission request, my first thought was, "Who is that?", followed shortly by, "it can't have been a month yet, can it?" because I was under the impression that you were still a relative newbie.

So I'm sorry, but I cannot grant you Permission. I advise you to stick around, chat a bit more, make a point of continuing some conversations, and get a beta-reader for your re-write. Also, don't be afraid to give a little more description and depth to your writing; we're here to enrich the world of the PPC, not use as few words as possible to narrate a mission.

And last, don't be discouraged. You're not the first person to be denied Permisson, or even the first person I've had to deny. I hope you try again.

Here is my request for permission complete with character summaries.

http://jakraziel.livejournal.com/695.html

As well as an introduction to them for a writing sample.

http://jakraziel.livejournal.com/852.html

My copy of Identity is on loan to someone else, so I couldn't look up the exact line. But it's true. Oy, what a tool.

I'd heard of "Ensign Sue Must Die" before, but never actually read it. That was most worthwhile - thanks for the link!

I've been reading that one for a while now. Fun times...

"You speak English, French, and some goddamn twangy thing I assume is Oriental". That's the doctor, Washburne. How much clearer can the man get? Sigh.

Only on a second read through. Up until that point I assumed I'd just forgotten what colour they were originally in between strips.

Hmm... If the Original Sue was a contemporary of James T. Kirk, shouldn't we have to travel forward in time instead of back? Besides, killing her is what started this whole nightmare in the first place, isn't it?

...

Damn you, Spock!

Gotta admit you're right, though. It is mighty satisfying to read about Sues getting their comeuppance.

But wait a minute, if this comic is correct, aren't all Sues simply one and the sa- OH GOD SEIZURE!

Now, we know how Sues were spawned.

Let's get back in time and killk Mary Sue before it happens.

Or maybe not. PPCing is fun. Mostly.

But I'm coming anyway. Or I might send my Agents hehehe...

Did you notice how her eyes (and, to lesser extent, her hair) kept changing color?

Mmpf... Heh heh... Ha ha ha...

DAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA!

Oh man. Oh, this is just priceless! You guys have got to take a look at this, 'cuz

it's freakin' awesome!

Now if you'll excuse me... Heh heh heh... Hee hee...

Although I can't find it any more, so it may have been deleted.

Point is, as everyone else has said - you *ask* first, yeah?

The Particular Problem of Postern Prison

This is written by Westron Wynde Who has several series of Sherlock Holmes stories. I haven't read them all, but all that I have are above excellent. I would pay for print copies of the series that the story I linked belongs to.