Subject: On nerfing my DMS agents
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Posted on: 2014-11-13 20:52:00 UTC
I am not offended, don't worry, but I am *very* concerned for my agents now that these issues have been brought up, and if the execution didn't fly with you, then I offer my apologies for it. The general idea I was thinking of here was that the Sue would be accidentally life-bound to Rayner - the very reason she cannot be killed off is because Rayner would have to be killed as well, and I don't know if the DMS can afford to lose an agent. The long list of abilities I did for both of my agents may have been a habit stemming from my own fiction doing similar things - the power levels of just about everyone are that overboard because they need to be. I doubt this is the case in the PPC, so I'll probably brainstorm remedies for this for each of my agents.
Looking back, Rayner being OP was due to giving him all of the characteristics of Rainbow Dash by default, something most MLP humanizations don't do (even Equestria Girls avoided this until the climax). If it's better that he doesn't have any superhuman abilities to begin with, which I'm sure it is for this context, then I can live with it. That being said, the frenzy mode is one of the things that made him unique in the first place, and I'll probably keep it for the sake of drama, but if it endangers other people then I may have to at least change it. What if instead, the frenzy mode primarily endangers himself, Leeroy Jenkins style? He could end up charging into situations he can't win, underestimate what the targeted Sue is capable of, and get himself hurt. A lot. Like Eren's Titan form, it would be interesting to explore the frenzy mode and its consequences as a plot device, with his partner constantly trying to keep his instincts from ruining the mission. Maybe there could even be a mission with an unforseen setback in that the very setting triggers the frenzy mode, and Rayner's partner will have to keep him restrained and finish the mission herself at the same time.
While Rayner is a badfic rescuee, techincally speaking, it's also true that he could use some characteristics to distinguish him from the canon he is based off of. To pull ideas out of the air, he's been through a lot of nasty stuff, so one thing I could think of is that he was severely broken by his past and PPC experiences. To this end, an Eren Yager-like "I must kill ALL OF THE SUES" mentality would be a good start - a Suvian character did kill his last partner, after all.
Regarding E.V.L., I initially thought that being unkillable was the reason she was recruited in the first place. But again, it wouldn't make for an interesting story, because she's supposed to be at risk too most of the time. As noted, the life-binding idea is one that I'd like to explore in the missions proper, especially since it would help me experiment with a hero/villain team-up like I intended. However, if she can't be killed, it wouldn't make a good story, while if she is killed straight away, I can't explore her character. Hmmmm... How about I make it a two-way connection? The life binding could mean that if either Rayner or E.V.L. dies, the other dies as well. So not only would this give the Flowers a reason not to just dispose of her (because it would mean having to also get rid of one of their own agents), but Rayner would also have a reason to protect her himself.
E.V.L.'s inclusion in the PPC was a means of exploring how an openly antagonistic character would react and adjust to being forced to fight on the side of good, or in this case how a bona fide Mary Sue (not an ex-Suvian like Anjilly's Joyce Reesin, but an actual Sue) would feel about killing stuff on par with the very material that created her in the first place. The fact that she's bound by canon will probably prevent her from using much of her powers at all, which would also force her to make do without being OP (and this goes doubly for disguises, which would prevent her from using her powers at all), so I could have her lament that she can't use her Suvian abilities only to be shot down by Rayner telling her that it was for her own good.
So overall, E.V.L. would probably be the of "Broken Bird" stereotype, since while the snarky straight man approach was proposed for Rayner, I think it fits better with her instead, as I see Rayner as being the more eager and passionate of the two when it comes to assassination. I also apologize for not realizing that sadistic Sue torturing is not something the PPC would approve of, so I'm getting rid of her sadism entirely.
Rayner's Patronus charm is consistent with his aggressive tactics, and is also based on Sandra and Freckles's exorcism selection and the Bella Black Driftwood mission, since this does take place in the Harry Potter continuum. I will probably also have to retcon the prologue so it would make more sense in light of all of the above information - Rayner would probably have a harder time fighting E.V.L. straight on, and given the above information, he'd probably get Worf'd in ten seconds flat. XD