Subject: Thinking of going for permission, any advice for Ava?
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Posted on: 2012-12-10 01:31:00 UTC

I'm thinking of going for permission eventually, and I've been trying to come up with two good, well-developed agents. I have one agent who I think is pretty good, OC wise, but as for Ava.... I'm worried that Ava may be a bit too sue-ish. I don't know if this is against the rules, but I just want to hear any suggestions that anyone might have for making Ava a better character.

Name: Ava Brooks (Full Name: Ava Mary Brooks)

Physical Appearance: Ava is of average weight. She has shoulder length copper ringlets. Big brown eyes, full-ish lips She's tall. She is fifteen years old. She wears glasses in order to read.

Personality: Ava is an optimist, very positive. She's loyal and makes friends easily. She's of average intelligence. She can be a bit vain, sort of self centered. She can be selfish and very dramatic. Over-reacts VERY easily, hates getting dirty. She wasn't to be a doctor, loves to read, does ballet and writes as a film critic in her school paper. She's a potterhead, loves LOTR and has read Twilight as part of a study on Mary Sues, and she hates it. Her favorite color is pink ("I can't help it that the Sues love it, it's a nice color!" ~ Ava) Glitter annoys her.

Back story: She joined the PPC because her cousin, Katie, is a DMS agent, who said she could join when she turned fifteen. Ava is from the real world, Australia, and she has two older brothers and two little sisters.

Is Ava sue-ish? If so, how can I improve. I don't want to change her character entirely, but anything anyone can advise?

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