Subject: Hmmm...
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Posted on: 2012-12-10 14:51:00 UTC

Springing off the previous discussion about Ava, it's possible that making her traits more specific will help. Say, she's loyal to her family, can be a bit vain and selfish, and makes friendly acquiantances easily, but might not have them as really good friends due to the aforementioned vanity and selfishness that shows up.

As far as her cousin, there are possible ways that you could play that (her idolizing her cousin and being naive to what the job actually entails, more than the cousin actively encouraging her, or possibly that her older cousin introduced her to fanfiction and mary sues before she joined the PPC, igniting a hatred of sues or something,) but as far as the rest of the family, I'd like to know how having the siblings affects her personality and daily life. For example, being the middle child might reinforce the vain and selfish aspects, because she's looking for more attention. Or perhaps the siblings are why she can affect a cheerful demeanor and get along with people at a very basic acquaintance-type level without having any deeper friendship.

I have no idea why not wanting to be a doctor was on there. Does someone expect that of her? Was that something she previously wanted before she realized how much she hates messes? (I'm also not sure why her activities are listed under personality, but that's just a formatting nitpick.)

It might be interesting if she thinks a lot of the PPCing like she would watching and critiquing a film, and then learns otherwise. Also, given that she's from world one, it might be convenient to have her be an intern so she wouldn't miss too much real world and school, like everyone else said.

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