Subject: Review
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Posted on: 2017-10-15 12:56:00 UTC

Ok, first off, that ending! You'd set me up for the idea that you were taking the prompt and turned it on it's head with the "day nothing can go wrong" thing (which would make sense as a PPC story) and then, dam, it might have all been a dream or something. Or not. Who knows? I don't, and that was really neat.

In retrospect, the missions were rather uncharacteristically easy for the PPC, which adds to the weirdness factor when you go back and look.

This will be a somewhat unhelpful review on the concrit side, since I'm having trouble finding something that could use work other than grammar and word choice stuff (I remember "dismissed" applied to choice of clothes jumped out at me). If you want me to go list that stuff out, let me know.

- Tomash

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