Subject: Thoughts
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Posted on: 2018-11-21 07:13:00 UTC

First thing is that you did a good job using description and dialogue style to get the rather intense emotional states running around this whole story across.

That all being said, I'm not completely sure what it is set Em did to set all this off. My initial guess was buying Cass another clock for her collection. By the end of the story (and this was my second reading) I'd switched over to Em fixing the watch that wasn't supposed to be fixed being the underlying issue, but I'm not completely sure of that.

- Tomash

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