Subject: As long as you understand...
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Posted on: 2018-08-09 14:34:00 UTC

... that putting all the responsibility on a girl (or boy, or other-gendered person) to make him change is one of the character's flaws, and it's a big one.

For the record, I absolutely believe that everyone deserves a fair shot at love regardless of non-chosen attributes like appearance, and loving and being loved can certainly have a major impact on your life, but it's not a magical cure for someone who's spent thirty years thusfar without a clue how not to act like a creep. The responsibility lies with the individual to fix their own behavior problems. Shoving it off on someone else ain't right. And it's a major issue in society (see: so-called "incels"), so please forgive me if I seem to be taking this fictional character concept that hasn't even been written yet too seriously. It's just that you're kinda playing with fire here, and I wanna be sure nobody gets burned. {= )

[Citation needed] on "most agents are skilled at wielding swords." Where do you find that to be the case? I'd say that, even if Kuro was lucky enough to find himself an agent trainer, sword instruction would only cover the basics of "how not to cut off your own arm." Certainly not nearly enough to pass as a katana expert if he just started learning in his thirties.

And ehhhh, getting held back a total of seven times and then dropping out of high school suggests to me that he either blew it off (and therefore wasn't really trying his best) or may be seriously mentally impaired and/or have other serious issues (if he really was). See, schools don't like to hold kids back if they can possibly avoid it, because it hurts their performance values. Having issues in just one or two subjects wouldn't do it. The problems would have to be very serious for them to do it multiple times. Anyway, trig and chem aren't even options in eighth and ninth grade, unless things have changed a whole lot since I was in school. You have to be able to manage basic math and general science first.

TL;DR: Much more thought needs to be put into this one to be sure his story makes sense and that he has a redeeming quality or two (that also make sense). As it stands now, I would not want to read about this character as an agent.

~Neshomeh

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