Subject: Harsh? You?
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Posted on: 2011-09-21 15:55:00 UTC

Puh-lease, PoorCynic. I've seen harsher than this.

I'm not sure I see where the vague pronouns turn Xanthus into a she. Point it out for me, pretty please?

I'm still working on getting her characterization down pat, so... Hopefully, she'll get more to do in the next mission as she's handling the RA pretty much the entire way through. Also, she gets to make comments based on her experiences with crime procedurals, so there's that too.

"The big problem with this big mission is in regard to your use of direct quotes from the badfic. Huge blocks of copy-pasted text do not an interesting read make. Honestly, this felt like I was just reading the badfic rather than an actual mission. I don't want that. I want to read agents being funny and snarky and awesome. The audience does not need to see every line from the fic being sporked. They don't even need to see most of the lines. They just need enough to realize where the fic is going wrong."

Well, I didn't want to trash the entire fic, because all things considered it's not god-awful. I wanted to point out the good things about it too, and in some points I felt the only way I could do that was to put in some of the huge blocks of copy-pasted text. So there's that whole thing too.

Plus, I had already skipped over a lot of material, particularly in the middle.

Seriously, this was a tough one to spork. Why is it the godawful ones are the easiest ones to make fun of?

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