You forgot to add the mission to the main page of the wiki (I noticed it now).

This was a fun read, as the badfic features some of my biggest peeves about Potter romances. (I won't turn this into a rant, but I'm mainly referring to the whole "magic bond" thing, and also making a huge deal about the money Harry's parents left in Gringotts. He's still a teenager, after all, and his "wife" already owns a house. What does he need all that money for?)

Anyway. I have to admit, I actually like Harry/Tonks, but only after Harry is older, so they're both adults. Fourteen vs. nineteen is a bit too dramatic a gulf for me. (There's a nineteen again. I swear they're everywhere.)

Sorry. I know I'm discussing the fic more than your mission, but I think everyone else has beaten me to the interesting comments. I am embarrassed to admit, I didn't get the joke about Luna seeing the agents until I read Nesh's comment below. Now that I get it, I must recognize it as sheer brilliant genius! I also like the research you put into it; I never would have recognized that Nundu thing as a canon monster, since it wasn't in the main series.

I agree that the easy swaying of Vilma/Mindy is the main weakness here. Other than some odd phraseology, the original author actually had her pretty in character for an average house elf (at least in the lines you shared in the mission). She would need a lot more convincing to abandon her masters, I think (although that logic bomb of Tonks not inheriting much is a good way to start).

I do like that you recruited not only the house elf, but Dogwig as well. Despite being a flagrant blasphemy against existence, it doesn't really do anything too obnoxious. It behaves just like a regular Potterverse owl--at super speed, but that could just be geo/time distortions--and didn't show particular loyalty to the replacements. Good to see some restraint and pity where it belongs! but seriously has the author never heard an owl

One thing I was wondering about is when the agents interrupt a question from Mindy. She never brings up whatever it was again. I was expecting something terrible to happen later, and then see Mindy say, "I was trying to ask about this . . ." but the line never payed off. Was this something that got cut, or am I just paying too much attention to that exchange?

There's also a part where Rina has dialogue split into two separate paragraphs. (Starting with "'Putting my curiosity to know that aside,'") I don't think there's any real reason for those two paragraphs to be split up as they are; nothing happens in between, so why should Rina pause there?

Things I like:

The agents taking the mirrors too soon and having to put them back, and recruiting Mindy too soon. Nice to see them making rookie mistakes and learning their lesson.

Having Luna seem to see them for a minute. I dig the idea that Luna sees things that are actually there. Nice, kinda Discworld-y.

Lots of little things, like "Way-the-Hey-Out-of-Character Land" and the agents being immature and laughing at stuff like "Number 69" and "stud muffin." *g*

Also, I try to avoid commenting on the badfic in mission reviews, but dear god was the dialogue in that fic painful. Just... ew. Not to mention how ~*special*~ everything was. I'm pleased that the ridiculous amounts of OOC and uncanon were addressed, and I fully sympathize with the agents' nausea. (BTW, they might consider carrying some candied ginger around with them. Ginger is good for nausea.)

Things I am not sure about:

How come Mcgonagoll is a he? I think the minis tend to take on the gender of their namemistakes. Related: I always thought mini-Aragogs were approximately human-torso-sized. Big enough to haul fangirls away. I can't back that up, though. Has anyone read HFA recently?

What, nobody reacts to the Dursleys being randomly killed off by terrorists? I mean, sure, no one likes them much, but I still think the fact that no one reacts at all is deserving of comment.

Mindy seems to give up on her perceived masters a little too easily for the average house-elf. It's not something they can just choose to do even if they want to, and I'm not sure merely explaining that she's in a bad story makes it not count. Also, who's she going to take care of in HQ? House-elves want masters, unless they're Dobby.

Typos:

* ad nauseum - Should be "ad nauseam".

* After biding Lupin farewell - Should be "after bidding Lupin farewell".

* "We is ABPDW, precious" - Shouldn't that be "We is ABPWD"? Or is there another messed up acronym?

* "Harry gives his want to Ollivander" - Should be "Harry gives his wand to Ollivander".

* Katie Bell,Chaser for the Gryffindor Quidditch team - Missing a space: "Katie Bell, Chaser"

* ... and spawning an army of mini-Aragongs" - Should be "an army of mini-Aragogs". (How embarrassing. ^_^; )

* "But he's a Cute Animal Friend!" - Should be "But she's a Cute Animal Friend!"

* There was a period in place of a comma in someone's dialogue somewhere, but I forgot to note it down and I can't find it again. {= (

All in all, a very enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!

~Neshomeh

Only two glitches in the whole shebang! Well done! (I agree with Randa about doing a continuum where the minis aren't giant spiders.)

Mindy is the cutest house-elf I've ever read. :) Where do you think she works now? Cafeteria? Personnel?

You made good use of Mindy / Vilma there, and the agents’ mistakes show that they are not very experienced yet. I also like how you handled the missing transition from dinner to morning.

But there is one (in numbers: 1) issue for the Repetitive Department of Repetition: “this one was named named Godrick”. And the badfics title is Harry Potter and the Tails of Cange. (I wondered whether you quoted a misspelling there and why you didn’t spork this, so I looked it up.)

Getting Not!Harry when he is wandless is a brilliant idea.

HG

"Viower excretion" should most definitely be "Reader discretion".
Also, what do the curly brackets around some of the badfic quotes mean?
Also, "Uncle Siri"? Lel on the Apple-influenced Stuthor :P
All-in-all, I enjoyed the mission. The badfic seems to be of the funny sort and Rina & Randa's reactions make it even more funny. It isn't too long, which is also a plus. Well done, Ixi.

So Sirius is one of Steven Jobs' partners?

There's a typo in your disclaimer, but that mission was a fun read.

I think my favourite part was the recruitment and subsequent interactions with Mindy, although the actual mention of physically writing a mission report at the very beginning was pretty great too. We don't see that kind of thing enough, in my opinion. And ooh, the recitation of canon is another trick that isn't employed as much as it should be. I loved that bit.

Really, like your last mission, this one had a very strong Original Series vibe to it, which is definitely a very cool thing.

-Aila

Finally! I've been sitting here and frothing at the mouth waiting for it to be done. :)