Subject: Oops! Knew I forgot to do something.
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Posted on: 2014-04-17 06:58:00 UTC

I like all three of these stories, although if you had to press me for specifics I'd probably say "Rejection" was my favorite. (I'll get into reasons why in just a moment.) The format of the stories -- the little vignettes jumping forward through time -- worked really well. It gives the reader a sense of how these relationships are progressing in a very efficient manner. One of my favorite shipfics, "Maslow", had a similar structure to it. We don't need to see every moment the characters are together and possibly say something flirtatious (something that many writers of bad shipfics and slashfics forget), just the most pertinent ones.

I can't say too much about "Near Misses" canon and character-wise because it's a been quite a while since I've read the Original Series. From what I recall, this seems very faithful and realistic to the characters of Jay and Acacia. I will say that I might have liked it a bit more if it had ended right after the line "I think I might do." That, to me, felt like it would have had more oomph.

"Rejection" was my favorite, as I mentioned. It is so rare to see what is almost an anti-shipping fic. Not in the sense of bashing the concept of shipping (that's very un-rare), but more that it doesn't end how most shipfics end. There is no happy ending. The confession of affection fails. I also like the gradual decline from silly to serious and sad.

"First Sight" felt the weakest of the three to me. It was still pretty darn good, but I wasn't as involved in the story as I was with other two. The wide swathe of characters that appeared made doing so a bit difficult, particularly regarding the agents I wasn't familiar with.

All in all, very nice work.

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