Subject: Speaking of something overlooked...
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Posted on: 2013-08-21 06:37:00 UTC

This was just something that I remember rubbing me the wrong way when I read it in Origins, and I just found out why.

In Hornbeam's Tale, Makes-Things is the creator of the blue effect surrounding the plot holes used in the portal generators, which was there since the beginning, but in Crashing Down, the blue glow was said to be added by a short-lived PPC Department as a response to "disastrous incidents" in the PPC's early days. That creates a minor intra-author continuity error that should probably be corrected. I'd say it would be best to just change a few sentences in Hornbeam's Tale to comply with the Crashing Down version, since changing the Crashing Down events would alter a scene-critical plot point.
Also, the relevant passage in Crashing Down uses the phrase "not, though few are aware, and intrinsic feature of the technology", which needs to have an "an" there rather than an "and".

I hope that I have restored some fraction of my lost honor with this post.

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