Subject: Speaking of typos...
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Posted on: 2013-08-21 10:52:00 UTC
In Chapter 3 of Origins: Of course, sending it was a far cry from knowing what it meant.
I think you meant sensing it
HG
Subject: Speaking of typos...
Author:
Posted on: 2013-08-21 10:52:00 UTC
In Chapter 3 of Origins: Of course, sending it was a far cry from knowing what it meant.
I think you meant sensing it
HG
I'm running out the door to catch a bus shortly, so I can't say more now or probably for a few days, but I wanted to make sure you knew at least that much. Oh, and I also picked up on the Canterbury Tales thing. {= )
~Neshomeh
I had an idea for an agent who joined up in the '60s (a fan of the original Star Trek), but since the PPC wouldn't have existed then I suppose she doesn't work.
Also, Makes-Things - when you put together "ageless" and "good with machines" in my head, you get android. Just an idea.
I've actually tweaked both stories to fix that - CD now says they were /worried/ about incidents, while Origins mentions the DHS wanted it added. Also, the typo is repaired - and I've found out how to stop that bizarre highlighting in CD, if anyone other than me even noticed that.
hS
In Chapter 3 of Origins: Of course, sending it was a far cry from knowing what it meant.
I think you meant sensing it
HG
Thank you!
hS
(and I'll probably get around to reading the rest of your history stuff at some point, now that I've been drawn in by this.)
I was wondering about the chapter titles, which appear to be somewhat inspired by the Canterbury Tales. I'm pretty sure that was deliberate, so I just wanted to ask how close the correspondences were, having not read Canterbury myself.
In the Big Thorn's Tale, you have him say, we Firstborn shared our knowledge and built on in before you ever awoke. I believe you meant to say built on it.
Both fixed. And thank you for the other comment, too - the Hyacinth was actually the one I was most worried about, because I've never written much with it before. So it's good to know you still think they're in character after you've read its contribution...
hS
Being that I have not done a lot of reading of Floaters missions, I am not that knowledgable of the Hyacinth's personality, so I would not suggest that you get too comfortable. Nonetheless, your portrayal of the Hyacinth is plausible; there was nothing that made me think "There's no way she'd act like that!"
As for the other Flowers, though, I can honestly say that I haven't seen anything so far that has come off as OOC.
Hm, now I have something to read. But a preemptive congratulations and good job to you!