Subject: This was excellent!
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Posted on: 2013-08-19 05:23:00 UTC

A lot of the scenes here are absolute home-runs. I especially love Makes-Things' dialogue and behavior around the flowers, the first agents' recruitment, and all the explanation for plotholes given. I love the development of the term "Merry Pseudo" and the very first Mary Sue ever encountered by the PPC. ("Don't worry. This is for my own good," is beyond a doubt the PERFECT expression of the attitudes of Sues as we define them.)

The only discrepancy I see is that you refer to the Floating Hyacinth with "he," but I was under the impression it was female. Then again, being a Flower, maybe it's both?

Also, I recall once reading about the crew of the ship that brought the seeds to Origin in the first place. I can't seem to find that story now; is that still available? Or was that by another author?

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