Okay, that's quite the list of points to address.

Some of them are quite valid, some of them we've thought through and haven't addressed yet, and some of them are mostly having a bit of fun, which was the whole number one point of the story.

So:

1. There're four of us and at least three of us are native English speakers, so any spelling\grammar mistakes that made it through are a collective failure on our parts that we'll see about correcting.

2. That's a fair point and something I try to keep in mind when I'm writing and something we're all practicing. Clearly we haven't quite got the style yet, so that's something we'll keep working on.

3. Before we even started writing the chapters, we drew up the characters. A lot of the things you put as 'Just Because' there we have thought through.
We might not have explained them right then and there, but that's because we have an endgame we're working towards or it's just something to work with in terms of character development.

Also, you might have noticed the story has a certain vibe of a pen-and-paper RPG in the scenes dealing with the Gods, which is intentional and also accounts for the density of eyebrow raising characters. It's a subtle joke on our part, though.

The witch we definitely have an endgame for her appearance, the dwarf is supposed to be a travelling merchant and something of a misfit and the Golem...Well, we're's the harm in having a bit of fun with a minor detail like that?

4. Something of an ironic jab at the source material, glad someone finally decided to mention it.

5. Patientia is a Fae dragon from the Flight Rising pet game. Hardly unique. She was included as a set up for a joke regarding the comparative size difference and Faes are really fun to write, given their monotone speech and expressing emotion purely through body language.

6. This was a concern of ours we asked clarification on in that chapter, so that's good to have that cleared up, so thank you for that.

7. This is a problem not unique to our story and something that can probably do with a closer look at on the edit, though one of the principle reasons it occurred that way so far as I can see is having multiple authors and this is our first time working together on a project.
We talk a lot, but this was a project I asked Rustic94, artark and LoverofGames to help me with because I wanted to write this story but wasn't certain of my skills to do it by myself.

A beta would probably help, true and character development is something we're trying to do as we go on.

The core principle we're writing this on is to have fun and hopefully our audience will as well.

Thanks for taking the time to look through, there were definitely points there we can pay heed to and a few points are explainable as this not quite being a 100% serious story and having some aspect of parody to it and some parts are set ups for things we plan to address in later chapters.

This is a work in progress, after all.

I think that's the vast majority of what you raised covered, so once again: Thank you for having a look, thank you giving some honest critical feedback and I hope you enjoy reading on if we haven't offended your sensibilities too badly. ;)

Do any of you have access to The Last Hero? I'm pretty sure there's a double-page spread of dragon breeds in there somewhere. It's surely more interesting to you (the writers) and to your readers to use and build on something that already exists, rather than inventing your own breed (not species) of dragon, right? And I'm pretty sure there's a couple of non-explosive types in there.

hS

The OCs were developed using somewhat of a RP character sheet, so there's a reason for the RP vibe you are getting.

Hopefully we can iron out the kinks as we go along in writing the story. We probably might break some rules but we're avoiding as many pitfalls as we can and cushion the blow of breaking the said rules.

And I know that looking to the PPC is probably not a wise decision for confidence but Blood made this comment:

"Sooo...

Do you think GoG would come under fire from the PPC?

Because I'd be cool with it getting Sporked, if only because of the entertainment value."

Sorry for repeating some stuff over again, this like talking to the SCP Foundation all over again.

Alright. The door is always open if you change your mind.

I've one question to ask before you go. Has PPC ever dealt with an internal problems like the SCP Foundation had to once or twice before?