Subject: I'm tempted to say 'both'.
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Posted on: 2015-06-15 19:13:00 UTC

I took a quick look over the first chapter/prologue (in my capacity as Administrator of OFUDisc), and the story seems... relatively solid. Specifically, the feel of the Discworld was pretty good: I didn't stare at things and yell 'that's not right!'. Equally, the canon characters who showed up were... decently in-character. I disagree with the characterisation of Fate, but it's been a long time since I read TCoM.

I have some problems with their punctuation - missing commas, and some very weird dashphen use. I also... how to put this? The OCs, from what little I saw in the prologue, feel like RP characters; they have some pretty exaggerated traits. One sees people sunbathing (in Ankh? Yeah, but then again, Ankh has a railway system these days), and immediately freaks out about 'nudity' (y'know, underclothes), and thinks about how she has to take baths with her eyes closed. Another has a pet swamp dragon (which doesn't seem at risk of exploding).

Put together, this feels like people who've put a lot of effort into their story - but aren't sure how well their characters (and plot) hold up. So, both confidence and concrit.

hS

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