You just need to make the summary memorable. Stock characters are a good way to go, they're easy to remember and identify with, but word it wrong and you can make it sound cliche. For me, to make a good summary, you need to give away a small detail that the readers will find out quickly, and make it interesting. One of the best summaries I've seen came from one of my friends for her Sailor Moon fanfic:
'Dane's not fussed she's suddenly the stormheeled warrior, Sailor Aello. she's got more important stuff to be concerned about then wangsting over a past life. That chainsaw inspired youma rushing at her head for example...'
From that, we know it's set in the Sailor Senshi Universe, the character, unlike most, isn't thrilled to be one of the Sailor Scouts, and makes it funny. That instantly caught my attention (Even though I don't follow Sailor Moon) and made me have a look-see.
Now, let's take a look at 'Opportunity'.
'A young king, having just taken back his family's crown, seeks advice from a loyal duke. How the heck do you rule a whole kingdom, anyway? Same world as "Turn, Turn, Turn" and "Fugitive;" different time and place. Completed May, 2008.'
Ok, we can tell it's slightly unusual, because the King doesn't know what to do. However, what throws people off is the latter part of it. Most, if they follow your stories, would assume it's set in the same Universe, and usually they don't really care when it's completed. I know that does sound harsh, but if you saw that on a story, you'd probably pass over it.
Now, let's see if we can pump some life into it!
'Oliver, having just come to the throne of his Kingdom has come to an epic conclusion; he has no idea how to be king! Deciding to better himself, he seeks out the advice of one of his most trusted subjects to find what it truly means to be King.'
Though it might be me being biased, that one seems a little more energetic. It seems a little lighter than what you might be going for though, so I'll try again.
'With his enemies defeated and his family restored to the throne, King Oliver must try to understand what it is to be a King. Realising he can't take this journey alone, he seeks the help of one of his family's most trusted Advisors.'
It's more stoic than the last, but it gets the information across. The word 'Journey' also peaks the responder's interest, and may make them more likely to click.
But yeah, that's just what's happened with me. Hopefully this helped!
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In my experience... by
on 2008-10-16 06:36:00 UTC
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Welcome back! by
on 2008-10-16 06:15:00 UTC
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And for 'My Immortal' I point to Mad Hattie. She's taken a personal grudge it seems against that story. So, hopefully she'll be dealing with it soon enough. We were actually talking about it's 'Sequal' earlier, 'Bring Me Back to Life', with many of us gibbering and breaking out the various Bleep products.
But anywho, welcome back! I gift you with some Bleepolate!
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Sedri did my thing with the links on the LJ comm. by
on 2008-10-16 06:02:00 UTC
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So all I can do is say hi.
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Nice to see you again! by
on 2008-10-16 05:35:00 UTC
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I already said hello on LJ, so I won't bother repeating all that. Nice to see you!
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Wow... by
on 2008-10-16 05:31:00 UTC
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I'm not dead yet (plus a badfic) by
on 2008-10-16 04:43:00 UTC
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Squeeeee!!!! SPORKS!! :D (nm) by
on 2008-10-16 01:21:00 UTC
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the *actual* APS... by
on 2008-10-15 23:44:00 UTC
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... can be found here; http://www.apostrophe.fsnet.co.uk/
I am not a member, except in spirit. I tend to follow the author of 'Eats, Shoots and Leaves' in asking
'Do they [the APS] have a militant wing? Can I start one? Where do you buy balaclavas?'
In other words, I just end up following people around pointing out where they're misusing apostrophes, is all :)
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Apostrophe Protection Society? by
on 2008-10-15 23:42:00 UTC
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*is even more OT than the Trojanhorse, but ah well* I haven't heard of it. Would a Ciri be allowed to join? *tries to look hopeful instead of just really OT*
C
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I call dibs. (nm) by
on 2008-10-15 22:42:00 UTC
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*shifty eyes* Anyone got a RA handy? *whistles innocently* (nm) by
on 2008-10-15 22:24:00 UTC
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utterly OT, but... by
on 2008-10-15 21:00:00 UTC
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http://www.girlgeniusonline.com/comic.php?date=20081015
IT'S A SPORK GUN.
WANT.
:DDD
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That would be awesome. by
on 2008-10-15 08:04:00 UTC
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And, yeah, absolutely in your own time.
I'm not sure whether or not you have my e-mail, so just in case, it is exswyzie14 (AT) yahoo (DOT) com, with the obvious replacements.
~Neshomeh
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I can do that... by
on 2008-10-15 07:02:00 UTC
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But you'll forgive me for not doing it instantly. I'll save all this and read it this evening, and get back to you - by email, maybe?
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I could start a whole rant on gold/silver discrimination... by
on 2008-10-15 07:01:00 UTC
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But I won't. Unless my non-existant boyfriend decides to buy a gold engagement ring, because I want silver. But that aside...
Yep, sounds good.
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In that case... by
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You were particularly quote-able by
on 2008-10-14 22:28:00 UTC
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You're in there twice, I think. Once in separately and once in the middle of a paragraph.
*hugs* Thanks! I was having trouble trying to use examples that everyone would know, sticking with things like Harry Potter, LotR and so on, but my teacher gave me the idea of describing one story early on to frame it, so I took that idea and ran with it. I'm very pleased with how it turned (not to mention the fact that I'm completely in love with Wicked just now.
Ah, I ramble. Sorry - that's me being self-indulgent. *hugs* Thanks again!
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That's a good question. by
on 2008-10-14 22:21:00 UTC
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Gold because.... by
on 2008-10-14 22:16:00 UTC
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...it usually gets used to symbolise the premium, best service offered. And we want to reassure our characters :)
(I prefer silver as well, for myself, but gold tends to be used for 'yay, we're the best')
I expect the different divisions of the DCPS would have things on the shields to differentiate them, or maybe the swords Artic suggested could be used for some division or other. But for the Dept. as a whole, the basic golden shield I think should be the symbol.
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*nods* In addition, you could... by
on 2008-10-14 22:11:00 UTC
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Have the initials of particular characters or names of continua 'engraved' (read: written / crudely stitched) on the shield. But that's detail. Shield sounds good - why gold, though? (I don't particularly like gold, you see. Prefer silver.)
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Mission Plug! by
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Sounds good to me. (nm) by
on 2008-10-14 14:47:00 UTC
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A new initiative from the Department of Intelligence. by
on 2008-10-14 14:46:00 UTC
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She can't be both? by
on 2008-10-14 14:12:00 UTC
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Anyways, if you need them, I offer up my Agents to help with your mish. Liadan is pretty good at rounding up those loose vowels which seemed to have vanished from her writing.
Though, does that really count as being in the Harry Potter Universe anymore? By this point I think it's a story that coincidentally has a few characters and locations in common.
Though she must burn in Tartarus for bringing Paris Hilton into it...