Subject: A start to my Dragon Prince fanfiction.
Posted on: 2020-03-14 19:56:32 UTC
I'd like a second opinion on if it's any good. The person who helped me says that it has potential.
On a boat on the river, the two princes rowed while Rayla sulked in the bow.
"Wow, I can't believe that worked," Callum said.
"I can't believe you're such a jerk," Rayla spat from beneath her hood.
"What?" Callum asked. "What's wrong?"
"You called me a bloodthirsty monster," Rayla said. "You have no idea how that feels."
"But I don't actually believe any of that," Callum said. "I was just trying to scare her. I thought she'd back down."
"Oh that went well" Ray.la turned to face him. "They tried to kill me."
Callum sighed. "I'm sorry. That's not what I meant to happen."
Rayla's retort was cut off by a screech coming from the sky. An angry flurry of brown feathers tried to claw at her face.
"No," Ezran shouted. "Leave her alone!"
The bird continued to attack Rayla as she huddled on the bottom of the boat to protect her face.
Ezran pulled a cape out of his satchel and threw it over the bird. "Stop that. Rayla's our friend. Why do you think she wants to hurt us?"
Once Ezran had adjusted the cape so the bird's head was free, it screeched.
Ezran frowned. "He says that he's dad, and that Viren used dark magic to switch his soul with Pip. He says that the elves killed his body."
"Ezran, this is no time for games," Callum said.
"It's not a game," Ezran insisted. I really can talk to animals and he says that he's dad."
"Don't listen to him, Rayla," Callum said. "I once asked him to prove it and he couldn't."
"I didn't know then that raccoons lie," Ezran said. "Ask me a question that only dad would know."
Callum shook his head.
Rayla had been quietly toying with the ribbon around her wrist. "The others got to the king. When assassins bind themselves to a mission, the ribbon won't come off until it's complete. I had two, but now I only have one."
Ezran listened to the bird making random notes. "He says that when he gave you the sketchbook, he hoped that you would see how good you are."
Callum's eyes widened. "That's what he said."