Subject: Very well done!
Posted on: 2023-10-11 19:18:53 UTC

I really enjoyed your ability to make drama, and that closing line... well done! I liked Summer's line about her name, and her calling out Moira was quote cathartic. I especially liked Falafel's nickname, and the canon scene. The payoff with Summer's powers was glorious. I love it.

At one point, the line "But usually she sticks to the plan, she thought. She’s not on a hairline trigger." occurs. Personally, I would italicize Moira's thoughts here.

-Ls, looking forward to the next installment.

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