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That sounds like it'll be super exciting for you! Stay safe and may you stay in key!

I'm planning on leaving her actually getting the surgery off-page since I don't really want to focus on the trans aspect of Ix's narrative; she mentioned wanting to get it done to Charlotte in their engagement interlude, and she's started on testosterone as of a few months ago. I'll mention she gets the surgery done, but like I said: I don't want to make this a huge focus to Ix's character, so it'll be a thing that happens and might slow her down on a mission or two, but nothing major besides that. (Unless you feel like it's really necessary?)

I stole Ix's dialogue from when I had surgery to remove tumors from my chest; her reaction upon waking up was basically exactly mine. Totally out of it, fell back asleep, woke up again with a clear head. I got very grabby with my mom (and apparently very demanding of food?) and most of what I wrote was told to me after the fact.

Thanks for the review. :)

I'm not entirely sure when I last read a mission that wasn't one I was writing, so I'm behind the times. Seems like this event would be important enough to get a full interlude, though?

Anyroad, this has the ring of truth to it, which is a good thing, but also makes it a little uncomfortable, because I'm also wondering just how much of this is based on real life. The dialogue in particular doesn't feel randomly distorted, but rather like a transcription.

Not much to nitpick here, and also I'm on a bus and getting close to my destination, so I guess I'll leave it at this: the piece is solid and it was effective at making me feel Ix's wooziness and the comfort of loved ones, so I reckon that's good!

~Neshomeh

The German Landsknechte used two-handed swords, known as Zweihänders, to great effect as a means of breaking through lines of massed pikemen.

I bid you well, most currently most prolific PPC writer.

You definitely deserve one, since you're running this whole show. {= )

I'm slightly hampered here by not knowing the continuum, so I have no clear idea what the monsters (I assume) look like, or what sort of implement Volcanic Storm is, or why people can talk through rolled-up pieces of paper on their arms. {= ) You don't necessarily have to explain every little thing someone who knows the continuum could be expected to know, but a bit of description instead of or in addition to the proper nouns here and there wouldn't hurt.

I do more or less follow what's going on, so that's good. However, I think the action could be improved by means of shorter sentences and more active voice, to increase the sense that lots of urgent things are happening very quickly. For example, the fifth paragraph could be rewritten something like this:

Cinnabar retreated as fast as she could. She didn't need to look behind her to know the Grimm were getting closer. [Maybe a bit of description of how they sound or something.] At the first opportunity, she swerved to her right, leapt into one of the few houses that wasn't either destroyed or on fire, and slammed the door shut behind her. It wouldn't stop them, but it would buy her a few seconds. She raced up the stairs. As she reached the top, she heard the Grimm smash through the walls and windows below.

Et cetera. Stopping there because I'm not sure she can really burn a hole in the ceiling and jump or climb through it faster than a bunch of monsters can climb stairs. Maybe she should torch the staircase behind her? Just a thought I had as I was typing this.

There are also commas missing at the end of the last two lines of dialogue.

With those improvements, I think you'd have a solid little piece here. Rescue missions and a selfless defender holding out until the last second to save everybody is good stuff. ^_^

~Neshomeh

And good luck with the surgery!

I'll be in Central Europe with my Chorale this next week! Not sure it'll be long enough for a mini Gathering, but if anyone's going to be in Salzburg, Vienna, Melk, Brno, or Prague... prepare for singing, I suppose? :)

Also, this'll be my first time abroad. Ever. |D Yay for plane rides!

Have a cake. I hope the surgery goes well.

Good luck with the surgery too. When you get out, have a super-special birthday cupcake! It's chocolate with chocolate chips and chocolate icing!

This came up with the first cloned cat - the cat that cloned from was, Raibow, was calico, but the clone CC (or Copy Cat) was not, because her cells all had the same X chromosome inactivated.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/CC_(cat)

We're the same age, you and I. Yes, we are. Heh.

Congrats on your getting Legal Drinking Age batch. And I wish you good luck on your surgery!

Best of luck with your surgery, and whatever you're planning to finish afterward, I'm sure everyone's gonna be HYYYYPED. :)

Here, have a celebratory Tabby Slime from Slime Rancher! "Those stripes, that tail, that wiggle, wiggle, wiggle."

The black and orange color genes in cats are linked to the X-chromosome. In each cell, one of each matching pair of chromosomes is inactivated, so in calicos and tortoiseshells, you get patches of a different color depending on which X is active. This pattern is only possible in cats with two X-chromosomes, ergo, almost all girls. {= D

It doesn't actually surprise me that most people don't know this, but it DID surprise me when an episode of Star Trek: TNG insisted a tortie was male. It CAN happen, if you get an XXY cat for instance, but it's very rare. I kinda ranted about it. Phobos was not impressed. >.>;

Further reading: X-inactivation.

~Neshomeh

If you want more cake, I have a black-hole chocolate one with red berries coating. And red berries fruit juice. Or kir for celebrate 21st birthday.

Also, good luck with your surgery operation.

and congratulations! I know I don’t really know you well, so perhaps it is an odd thing to feel, but I am still excited for you. I hope you have a wonderful birthday, and good luck with your surgery!

And I'm glad to know I'm not considered a scary oldbie anymore. ;)

Here's to another good year of grouping on fireteams!

It's been a good year or so that I've known you, and I've gotta say, when I met you as a newbie I was a bit terrified, but now I've got a massive load of respect and consider you a friend. With that, congratulations on your upcoming surgery, and hope all goes well!

- Maxewell

And not just any birthday—I'm finally turning twenty-one! I'm now legally old enough to drink in 'Murca! *throws confetti* I can't believe I was sixteen when I joined the PPC... How time flies, huh?

I'm not planning on much, just a few strawberry margaritas, pizza, and Cards Against Humanity with Aegis and friends from high school. Oh, and Reese's tiger pie for a cake. Yum.

But that's not all that's going on—I've got a bit of an announcement to make.

I might not be on the Board a whole lot over the next week because I'm finally getting top surgery done on the 14th! We're having to travel out of state, so that'll be two nights in a hotel (Fun when you're recovering, huh?) and after that I'll likely be pretty out of it.

But in just a few days, I'll be finally, finally getting it done. And I can't wait.

Drinks all around!